Was gunna use this as a collab with Innovation but he never got back to me about it and that was like over a month ago so thought I might as well post it. Wasn't really meant to be a sequel to
Part I but it's got a similar feel so whatever.
Just an experimental verse really , nothing extraordinary, was just tryna keep up the same rhyme scheme throughout
I'm super contageous and stupid with razors
My rhymes are so good, y'all be looping the phrases
Wooping & praising, distracted as I go shooting with tazors
At Tiger, Phil and Ernie who I then root to win majors
Loot to start wagers on silly shit, like Barca losing to Rangers
Choosing odd strangings to put in stupid ass dangers
Rewind time, stab Jesus and let him recoop in the manger
Give a bark to a sheep and a moo to a reindeer
I'm coming to a town near you and I'm soon to offend ya
Get birthday gifts from my Nan then give the loon some dementia
Now buys me gifts every week and new fucking dentures
Knew I'd offend ya! and I'm waiting to be sued for a tenner
That's all I got left, spent the rest on two hundred Ginsters
Giving the flu to old spinsters, watching them die slooow in an instant
My minds so freaking distant that my head assumes it's gone missing
(the 'slooow in an instant' line is purposely ironic btw)
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Madness Part II
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Re: Madness Part II
by Static » Feb 25th, '11, 15:50
Holy shit, your multies are out of this world! I fucking love it, nothing to complain about really!
Are you going to record it?
Are you going to record it?
They say the good die young,
That's why I think that you should have fun
Cos time won't wait for no one
When god calls, you gotta go home
They say the good die young
That's why I know that we go' have fun,
In this life cos you only get one
When God calls for me, don't cry I just went home ♪
That's why I think that you should have fun
Cos time won't wait for no one
When god calls, you gotta go home
They say the good die young
That's why I know that we go' have fun,
In this life cos you only get one
When God calls for me, don't cry I just went home ♪
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Re: Madness Part II
by Konseptic » Feb 25th, '11, 21:40
Static wrote:Holy shit, your multies are out of this world! I fucking love it, nothing to complain about really!
Are you going to record it?
This
Ps. Good choice of football club
So if I should ever fall and get caught in a hustle
Let them know that I died while I fought in a struggle
From the hoodrats to rich kids lost in a bubble
Spray paint it on the streets and in the subway tunnels
Write it down and remember, that we never gave in
The mind of a child is where the revolution begins
So if the solution has never been to look in yourself,
How is it that you expect to find it anywhere else?
BALLIN UNCONTROLLABLY
Let them know that I died while I fought in a struggle
From the hoodrats to rich kids lost in a bubble
Spray paint it on the streets and in the subway tunnels
Write it down and remember, that we never gave in
The mind of a child is where the revolution begins
So if the solution has never been to look in yourself,
How is it that you expect to find it anywhere else?
BALLIN UNCONTROLLABLY
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Re: Madness Part II
by classthe_king » Feb 25th, '11, 22:24
Rhyming was great and the flow was good because of the rhyming but a lot of what you said seemed nonsensical and randomly said for the purpose of rhyming.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Madness Part II
by ChristinaE12 » Feb 25th, '11, 22:28
classthe_king wrote:Rhyming was great and the flow was good because of the rhyming but a lot of what you said seemed nonsensical and randomly said for the purpose of rhyming.
I agree with this...
But don't see it as a bad thing. Long as all your shit you ever do isn't the same. And yours hasn't been. Every one who writes does this sometimes. Keeping the same rhyme scheme/end rhymes throughout is hard enough on it's own. Which I think is the main reason why some of the rhymes are just random and pretty much have to be.
Keep writing. I enjoy your pieces.
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Re: Madness Part II
by MikeNUFC » Feb 26th, '11, 13:57
Cheers guys. 
Class - yeah it was just an experimental, messing about with multies and rhyme schemes and such. Hence some nonsical rhyming.
I don't record, Static. Thanks though
Class - yeah it was just an experimental, messing about with multies and rhyme schemes and such. Hence some nonsical rhyming.
I don't record, Static. Thanks though
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