"Looking for a way out"

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we can reminisce the days that I would beg for you to sit with me,
and whisper in your ear another lullaby symphony
by simply.. smothering your dignity,
another round of sympathy (if the mission isn't clear
I'll), scribble every mark into the rhythm that your heart skips..
a vision in the dark a new direction to depart with,
a message.. Peeling back the layers of disgust when you said it
a, part time prayer that you never got to touch,
(let it rust, sever us)
I was better in the months that would follow..
Touch gloves, swollow up the love that's in the air
and, thumbs up another pair of blood bank doners
(her hormones).. illuminate the room until the womb is lit
you find that it was hollow and there's nothing you can do with it,
Screw with it a moment and you'll unhinge,
the truth behind the latch-key, that's me (come in)
have a seat and ask me if I'm happy or something


I don't wanna run but I gotta get away from you
(I don't wanna run, I don't wanna run)
I don't wanna run but I gotta get away from you
(Gotta get away, gotta get away) x2


time past, sun sets, I fight a new addiction
in the friction of the wings of the life that I was living in,
A butterfly effect with the opposite affection
I'll, top it with a message, aggression is a lovely thin
subtle tinted window that is holding all my nothingness,
Hidden under layers of a muffled grin.. (I'm stuck again)
Bundled with intent that I would never let you love again..
sell me on the points where the friction of your cheak is
enough to fill the void when the ditch in me is deepest,
I am gripping to the weakest.. sound that I can muster up
I downed it with another cup of "drowning in the deep end"..
while choking on a rope of lies, that you tried feeding me
with no surprise that they wer-en't even tied up neatly..
I'd hide inside myself and climb the knots out of my stomach
(Fucking with the butterflies until they're causing me to plummet)..
I'll hit the ground running.. ((hit the ground running))


I don't wanna run but I gotta get away from you
(I don't wanna run, I don't wanna run)..
I don't wanna run but I gotta get away from you
(Gotta get away, gotta get away).. x2





I fed yah-hah's piece.

[Block]

I hate doing this, but... Bump.

[SlimShadyX313X]

Pretty good, I liked the multies and keep it up.

[Mahmoud48]

record it, i wanna hear ur flow and delivery to the lyrics

[Wreck]

You need to post a link of feedback on somebody else's writing piece in this forum, or else this will be locked.

[Wreck]

we can reminisce the days that I would beg for you to sit with me,
and whisper in your ear another lullaby symphony
by simply.. smothering your dignity,
another round of sympathy (if the mission isn't clear
I'll), scribble every mark into the rhythm that your heart skips..
a vision in the dark a new direction to depart with,
a message.. Peeling back the layers of disgust when you said it
a, part time prayer that you never got to touch,
(let it rust, sever us)
I was better in the months that would follow..
Touch gloves, swollow up the love that's in the air
and, thumbs up another pair of blood bank doners
(her hormones).. illuminate the room until the womb is lit
you find that it was hollow and there's nothing you can do with it,
Screw with it a moment and you'll unhinge,
the truth behind the latch-key, that's me (come in)
have a seat and ask me if I'm happy or something


I don't wanna run but I gotta get away from you
(I don't wanna run, I don't wanna run)
I don't wanna run but I gotta get away from you
(Gotta get away, gotta get away) x2


time past, sun sets, I fight a new addiction
in the friction of the wings of the life that I was living in,
A butterfly effect with the opposite affection
I'll, top it with a message, aggression is a lovely thin
subtle tinted window that is holding all my nothingness,
Hidden under layers of a muffled grin.. (I'm stuck again)
Bundled with intent that I would never let you love again..
sell me on the points where the friction of your cheak is
enough to fill the void when the ditch in me is deepest,
I am gripping to the weakest.. sound that I can muster up
I downed it with another cup of "drowning in the deep end"..
while choking on a rope of lies, that you tried feeding me
with no surprise that they wer-en't even tied up neatly..
I'd hide inside myself and climb the knots out of my stomach
(Fucking with the butterflies until they're causing me to plummet)..
I'll hit the ground running.. ((hit the ground running))


I don't wanna run but I gotta get away from you
(I don't wanna run, I don't wanna run)..
I don't wanna run but I gotta get away from you
(Gotta get away, gotta get away).. x2





I fed yah-hah's piece.

I didn't see this at the end, but you still have to post the link, you can't just say I did it, you have to physically provide evidence. Just lettin u know, even though I'm not a mod here.

I liked this piece, it was creative, something different, the multis were good, the vocab was nice, and it really sounds like a song like somebody else said, so I'm waitin for you to record it .

[Wreck]

Btw, you really shouldn't say bump unless it's been sitting for quite some time lol. While 3 hours seems like a lot, this forum on TR isn't as active as others, and for awhile it's dead as shit, so I'm thinking we, people who do post and feed here, should get it running as much as we can .

[Block]

I fed yah-hah's piece.

I can't paste my lyrics + copy url's when I'm on my phone, so I just say what I fed. People should know that I feed alot more than I post lyrics, though. But thanks for trying help

Also, I posted this like 18 hrs ago.

[Wreck]

I fed yah-hah's piece.

I can't paste my lyrics + copy url's when I'm on my phone, so I just say what I fed. People should know that I feed alot more than I post lyrics, though. But thanks for trying help

Also, I posted this like 18 hrs ago.

My bad, I saw 2 and I thought it was 2 PM, then I agree with you there. And oh aight, my fault bro.

[Block]

it's cool

[mcZu]

Great piece, the rhyming is top notch, and the content is good. Enjoyed reading it, keep it up.

[Xray]

Dude, this is your best flow, I usually have some trouble flowing some of your lines, but this shit was smooth as a baby's ass. This is my favourite piece from you. That was seriously flawless. The hook was great too, I really enjoyed it. Your second verse had a creepy feeling towards the end, that caught my attention straight away. This is definitely flawless, there's nothing I'd say to fix, it's all perfected already. Keep up the great work man, I gotta hear this shit.

[Block]

Dude, this is your best flow, I usually have some trouble flowing some of your lines, but this shit was smooth as a baby's ass. This is my favourite piece from you. That was seriously flawless. The hook was great too, I really enjoyed it. Your second verse had a creepy feeling towards the end, that caught my attention straight away. This is definitely flawless, there's nothing I'd say to fix, it's all perfected already. Keep up the great work man, I gotta hear this shit.

Thanks bro. Really appreciate it.

@zu thanks bro.