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Mean Fool

Postby VenomBlackViper » Mar 19th, '11, 04:16

Mean fool
Slaughtering packs of wolves while wearing sheep wool
Drop a van full of pedofiles off in front of a preschool
Drown your whole fucking family in your gene pool
I'm on an insanity spree
Cut off your moms leg and choke you with the amputees knee
Use it to hang you, laugh as you rapidly bleed
Then slit your throat & see how far your adams apple falls from the family tree
I run a daycare center full of aborted kids
In a haunted house I bought with a mortgage bid
Theres a fine line between genius & insanity, too bad i snorted it

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Re: Mean Fool

Postby VenomBlackViper » Mar 21st, '11, 10:29

Thanks man exactly what I was aiming for with this. I might start posting my shit in CW more often.
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Re: Mean Fool

Postby Sam. » Mar 21st, '11, 10:59

Oh shiiiit . :laughing:
[Rollefsen] - SajN retired, bitch got old, unlike Sams "ladies".
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Re: Mean Fool

Postby VenomBlackViper » Mar 21st, '11, 11:16

MCSam wrote:Oh shiiiit . :laughing:

I take laughing as compliment, thereby I am
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Re: Mean Fool

Postby Sam. » Mar 21st, '11, 11:25

VenomBlackViper wrote:
MCSam wrote:Oh shiiiit . :laughing:

I take laughing as compliment, thereby I am
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Re: Mean Fool

Postby VenomBlackViper » Mar 21st, '11, 11:30

That pic deserves it's own shady shots thread tbh, being used once here just doesn't do it justice.
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Re: Mean Fool

Postby Sam. » Mar 21st, '11, 11:36

VenomBlackViper wrote:That pic deserves it's own shady shots thread tbh, being used once here just doesn't do it justice.

word :smoking:
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Re: Mean Fool

Postby VenomBlackViper » Mar 30th, '11, 05:47

I'ma bump this one more time before posting something else :whistle:
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Re: Mean Fool

Postby MikeNUFC » Mar 30th, '11, 17:11

I like this. Obviously influenced by Rhyme Asylum and Eminem but there's nothing wrong in that.

I like how each 'mean' act linked in some way - wolves/sheep wool, drown/gene pool, paedophiles/preschool, adams apple/family tree.

And it wasn't forced because it all made sense, unlike a lot of random-content pieces where nothing links.

Good stuff. :y:
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Re: Mean Fool

Postby VenomBlackViper » Mar 30th, '11, 23:32

Yup Rhyme Asylums been a huge influence on my writing as of late, and thanks glad some of the best members on here like it.
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Re: Mean Fool

Postby DƎRDYPK » Mar 30th, '11, 23:34

not too bad :b:
keep writing
only complaints bout this is it shoulda been a lil bit longer :whistle:
but it's dope for what it is :y:
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Re: Mean Fool

Postby VenomBlackViper » Mar 30th, '11, 23:52

Thanks bruh, & yeah it's short cuz I threw this together on Thursday night & decided to post it here as well. I finished it a couple days later & added it as a 16 to a song.
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Re: Mean Fool

Postby classthe_king » Mar 30th, '11, 23:56

The adams apple and gene pool deff reminded me of Rhyme Asylum, dope shit :y:
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Re: Mean Fool

Postby WakeUpShow » Mar 31st, '11, 11:59

one of the funniest pieces I've read in a while
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Re: Mean Fool

Postby ArsheyHaq » Mar 31st, '11, 22:23

"Mean fool
Slaughtering packs of wolves while wearing sheep wool
Drop a van full of pedofiles off in front of a preschool
Drown your whole fucking family in your gene pool"

Some dope rhyming and wordplay right there :)

"Theres a fine line between genius & insanity, too bad i snorted it"

Haha that was a pretty insane way to end it :y: easily my favorite line

This is my first time reading a piece by you. I didn't know you wrote, and so well at that, but I'll definitely be looking for more from you. You really impressed me!
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