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Mother Dearest

Postby ArsheyHaq » Apr 9th, '11, 23:29

Just a wee-bit frustrated lol

I wish I had a flux capacitor, I woulda went back and stuck a catheter/
in my dad's dick or told 'em to go and wear a rubber/
cuz I don't wanna be son to no overbearin' mother/
I'm growin' weary of her/
it isn't ordinary how so unfair and stubborn/..she is
I'm always feelin' smothered/
and let her know that she ain't goin' nowhere near my brothers/
wish we could leave, but there'd be no one there to show her care and love her/
just gotta hold in there and suffer/
a little while longer..but I gotta grow a pair, get tougher/
soon! Cuz it's startin' to feel like I've got no more air I'm suffo-/
cating...*cough* *gasp* sorry *choke* coronary ulcer/
*drops dead*


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Re: Mother Dearest

Postby ArsheyHaq » Apr 15th, '11, 17:29

*cough* BUMP! *cough* lol
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Re: Mother Dearest

Postby Maybe » Apr 15th, '11, 20:11

As usual your stuff is conceptually flawless, humorous and generally amazing. The flow was top notch, and the whole thing came together very well.

Props man, 10/10. If you have a moment, check out my new love song ^^
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Re: Mother Dearest

Postby 4D » Apr 15th, '11, 22:19

That's very good, I like it. You should elaborate on it.
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Re: Mother Dearest

Postby ArsheyHaq » Apr 16th, '11, 00:56

Yeah, I suppose it is a bit short... The thing is, with me, is that I have trouble reading people's verses ALL the way through without getting tired or distracted so I like to keep my stuff nice and short.
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Re: Mother Dearest

Postby VenomBlackViper » Apr 17th, '11, 02:40

As usual this was dope, you have a great use of vocabulary too.
I liked the ending as well would have been even better if it was on audio, you should definitely record this sometime.
Keep it up man. :y:
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Re: Mother Dearest

Postby ArsheyHaq » Apr 18th, '11, 06:21

I'll record the moment I get stuff to record with lol
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