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I'd Still Want You

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I'd Still Want You

Postby Fa-Q » Apr 26th, '11, 07:26

Poem I wrote about a girl that played a pivotal part of my life. Enjoy.


If you moved a thousand miles away,
I would still want you,
If you didn't have any smiles today,
I would still want you,
If the sun stopped being bright,
I would still want you,
If the weaning night, started seeing light,
I would still want you,
If all my lyrics about you, burned in a fire,
I would still want you,
If I said I didn't want you, and you learned I'm a liar,
I would still want you,
If I gave you this and you turned your back away,
I would still want you,
If all colors turned black and grey,
I would still want you,
If I died a thousand fast deaths,
I would still want you,
If I knew I only had a thousand last breaths,
I would still want you,
If I have to paint a picture, of how I feel about you,
I would still want you,
If you never understand, which I doubt you do,
I would still want you,
If for you, have an endless smile, I have to cry forever,
I would still want you,
If for your happiness, I don't tell you, and I don't try ever,
I would still want you,
if I die today, because I fly away, I want you to know,
I would still want you,
If I lied awake, thinkin I would have tried to take,
My songs to you, that a part of me died to make,
I would still want you,
If all my smiles, turned to the brink of tears,
I would still want you,
If you leave my poems in the rain, and all the ink smears,
If you cried a thousand tears straight,
I would still want you,
If just for you, I had a thousand years to wait,
I would still want you,
If were together, only in my head,I would still want you,
If were never together, and you lie, lonely in your bed,
I would still want you,
If you never looked my way,
I would still want you,
I would want you to know, you hooked your prey,
I still want you,
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Re: I'd Still Want You

Postby Sam. » Apr 26th, '11, 18:58

Some lines were quote worthy and unhhhh nice multis ,was expecting some thing real emotional when i read the title bu t oh well .
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Re: I'd Still Want You

Postby Spyder » Apr 27th, '11, 03:03

through me for a loop too,
was nice i guess but much rather your older pieces,
actual rap man hahaa :y:
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Re: I'd Still Want You

Postby Fa-Q » Apr 30th, '11, 12:26

Spyder wrote:through me for a loop too,
was nice i guess but much rather your older pieces,
actual rap man hahaa :y:

thanks spyder....yeah I'm getting back to how I used to write
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Re: I'd Still Want You

Postby mcZu » May 1st, '11, 19:01

I liked it, it's good to experiment once and a while with your writtens. I enjoyed reading it, good job.
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Re: I'd Still Want You

Postby Fa-Q » May 4th, '11, 22:01

thanks Zu
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