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Did Me Wrong

Postby Mr.DGAF » Sep 18th, '11, 20:25

This started out as a throw-away verse from another project I was doing. But I figured I'd restructure it and release it as it's own verse. So, lemme know if you like it or not.

At first it burned to see you yearn to leave
Concerned and it was hurting me, I learned to read
The signs of beef, but it’s too late, you weren’t for me
Though it’s okay, I hope to be, the guy you’d love eternally
Internally it’s hard to see, externally it bothers me
You’re flirting out with Bobby D. , and robbing me of property
Now I’m stuck in this poverty, though honestly, it ought to be
Better if there’s comradery, there’s gotta be, you’ve gotta see
Without you I am lost at sea, be my captain, stop and think
About the times that we had shared, the wear and tear that we both bared
You know I cared, and if you're scared then cuddle up, I'll stroke your hair
But this is what it comes to, you out flirting with some young dude
Like I’m just a fucking dumb fool, or just some tool with no blood who
You can use and choose, abuse too, well if that’s the truth, then fuck you.



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Last edited by Mr.DGAF on Dec 7th, '11, 01:34, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Did Me Wrong

Postby Sam. » Sep 18th, '11, 20:30

:y:
This might be your best work as off now .The rhyming was a bit ehh but the scheme was awesome .Nice Imagination .
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Re: Did Me Wrong

Postby Man1x » Sep 18th, '11, 20:32

I love the flow, the subject matter was good as well. It was very constant and enjoyable, keep popping bro! :y:
However, rhymes could have been better but it didn't detract from the piece in any sense.
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Re: Did Me Wrong

Postby Mr.DGAF » Sep 19th, '11, 19:37

Thanks guys. I'm definitely working on vocabulary improvement, reading the dictionary a lot lately. But with these more recent peices I've mostly been focused on switching around rhyme schemes, so hopefully that shows. Thanks for the feed, guys!
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Re: Did Me Wrong

Postby Mr.DGAF » Sep 19th, '11, 22:51

Menzo wrote:This was great man, tons of rhyming and it flowed effortlessly for me :y:

Looking forward to more drops homie.



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