Power Down [TRACK 7]

[SG.]

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[Intro]

So as we come to the end...

[Chorus]

Let me know what I did wrong
Did I make shitty songs?
I don't work with no sound
So I should power down

[Verse]

You said I wasn't good enough
My skills weren't going up
Why do you have to be cruel?
Just so y'all can be cool
You are just all fools
Like Benzino and Ja Rule
I ain't no Shady
I'm Zabe, baby!
Which means I'm a fighter
The invisible ghostwriter
Possessing your page
And giving your pen AIDs
Yeah, I'm worse than an STI
I post another verse and you just pass me by
I've tried to do right, what more do you want?
I guess it's time to return the taunt

[Chorus]

Let me know what I did wrong
Did I make shitty songs?
I don't work with no sound
So I should power down

[Verse]

"Do you have an accent?"
Shit, I dunno
"Was being shit an intent?"
Bitch, let it go
If you don't like it, I didn't force you to read it
I only sent a thousand PMs, saying "have you seen it?"
Believe it, Venom spat at me
"You're no good", GET AT ME BRO!
So, here we go, here's another joint
Puff, puff, shit on it and say your point
Pass it after you post two replies
If you met me in real life, you'd be real shy
So you think you're all tough and should be GOAT?
Fuck you, you should be pushed to sea in a boat
So there goes my consciousness
The EP's over, bitches

[Man1x]

Does any of this apply to me?

[SG.]

No, just critics in general. I still love you all though.

[SG.]

B•U•M•P

[Mr.DGAF]

Alright man, I think honestly this was some sketchy work. It just didn't really stick out to me, ya know? The second verse was solid, I liked that. I really liked the way you started it too, it was creative. But the first verse just isn't anything special. Eh rhyming wise, eh concept, decent flow, and it was pretty short.

Don't take it the wrong way, it's just that I've seen you write a lot better than this. I know you were anxious to get to work on the LP, but if that was the case, you should've just dropped this track, because it seems rushed.

[RainMan44]

I agree, this seems rushed.

I don't remember if I've read any earlier pieces from you, but some stuff you can work on is the structure. I can't tell if every 2 bars is supposed to be connected to become 1, or if your bars are just short. Multies. I know you know what those are. Incorporate them into your work.

Not terrible, but some work needs to be done on it.

Keep pushin' bro