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Lights In My Eyes (feat. Mr. DGAF) [TRACK 3]

Postby SG. » Sep 30th, '11, 19:13

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[Intro (Sung) - Zabe]

Wanna be famous?
Wanna be famous?
You'll always have the chance to fulfil your cravings

[Verse 1 - Mr. DGAF]

Have you ever wanted something so bad, you cry at nights?
Then wipe your eyes, in hopes that you can find the fight
And take flight with your might, because tonight it’s right
And if not, then it’s over, no more time for pipe dreams
It might seem crazy, but this light is brightening, 
My grip grows tighter with this mic, so try me, 
Might flip those tired thoughts and go buy a new dream
Rap isn’t working so I’ll try some new things 
Back in the force bringing my subdued schemes
Never will be famous, so for now I’ll do me, 
And hope that with time someone nice will pull me
And fuel me to leave this pen, got no friends,
Got no ends, commit no sins, but in the end
Does it matter, if I’d rather do somethin’, 
With my life, take my chance and end my gripes
Earn my stripes and burn the lies, fire churns and hurts my eyes
So many guys take life for granted, like it’s planted and you can get
Everything you wanted and it couldn’t fathom leave you stranded
But for me that’s just too heinous, you want greatness, come and take it
But realize it’s hard to make it, so don’t fake it, make me famous

[Chorus (Sung) - Zabe]

I got lights in my eyes
A shiny new ride
But I guess I'm gonna have to bide my time
I wanna be famous
I wanna be famous
You can't live with a smile
Everybody gets riled
I guess I've got to travel another 8 miles
I wanna be famous
I wanna be famous

[Verse 2 - Zabe]

Don't Give's not the only desperado, I've got intentions too
If you're me, would you feel overshadowed if Geno don't mention you?
I don't believe in destiny, just infinite possibilities
And everything leads to a higher probability of killing me
When money and power seem so far out of reach
Send choccies and flowers so you can call out a leech
If I was famous, do you think I'd be doing this shit?
I see so many lights that I'm having an epileptic fit
At the rate my talent's dwindling, I'll be lucky to see my kin again
Fuck, the page got ripped again, because the pen's embedded in
At the same time, I wouldn't ever want to be famous
It seems like wealth and pain live on simultaneous
I'd never see my sister, and she can't survive alone
My manager would say she didn't ring because it was dial tone
I'd leave everyone behind, I even have pity for the assholes
Without me, they're targetless, they'll just watch the grass grow
Friends I've known for a decade, forgotten once I get made
I doubt I'll ever be friends with Kanye West or Just Blaze
Celebrities put it on for the paps, really they're lonely
I don't want to be a drug addict, screaming "blow me!"
You see Eminem, blacked out on pills for 5 years
Jay-Z killing them, getting billed for buying ears
I see that life was torture for most when they became a success
I guess I don't care about the fame then, fuck this

[Outro (Sung) - Zabe]

Wanna be famous?
Wanna be famous?
You'll never get enough to fulfil your cravings

LOF:
Zabe - http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=127786
Mr. DGAF - http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=128318

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Re: Lights In My Eyes [TRACK 3]

Postby Mr.DGAF » Sep 30th, '11, 19:49

Dang man, I think you got me on this one. You're imrpoving drastically recently man, major props for that. The flow is on point, the rhymes are good, the vocab is some of the best I've seen from you, and you stayed on subject nicely the whole time. I really like it man, good stuff.

Also, nice hook. :y:
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Re: Lights In My Eyes [TRACK 3]

Postby SG. » Sep 30th, '11, 19:54

Thanks, Geno. But still, fuck you. (I'm kidding)

Mr. DGAF, I don't think it's fair to say I had the better verse when I wrote mine after yours, and extended it from 16 to 24 just to get the advantage over you. In my opinion, your verse was better.
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Re: Lights In My Eyes [TRACK 3]

Postby SG. » Oct 1st, '11, 21:40

BUMP!
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Re: Lights In My Eyes [TRACK 3]

Postby Man1x » Oct 2nd, '11, 03:19

Dope shit, Zabe takes it away with multis, Mr. DGAF got flow. Amazing drop from my two favorite rights in this section. Both you improving mad fast.
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Re: Lights In My Eyes [TRACK 3]

Postby SG. » Oct 2nd, '11, 19:40

Thanks, man(ix).
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Re: Lights In My Eyes [TRACK 3]

Postby Man1x » Oct 2nd, '11, 19:47

Zabe wrote:Thanks, man(ix).


Ahhh I see whatcha did there. My diss verse is being written but when I release it just remember nothing personal :y:
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Re: Lights In My Eyes [TRACK 3]

Postby SG. » Oct 2nd, '11, 19:53

Man1x wrote:
Zabe wrote:Thanks, man(ix).


Ahhh I see whatcha did there. My diss verse is being written but when I release it just remember nothing personal :y:

Alright, just post it in the battle thread once I put it up.
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Re: Lights In My Eyes [TRACK 3]

Postby Man1x » Oct 2nd, '11, 20:06

I can't wait to see what you come up with though after reading this. You'll probably murk me jusssayin'
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Re: Lights In My Eyes [TRACK 3]

Postby SG. » Oct 2nd, '11, 20:11

I haven't even wrote it yet :D
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Re: Lights In My Eyes [TRACK 3]

Postby Man1x » Oct 2nd, '11, 20:15

Zabe wrote:I haven't even wrote it yet :D


I finished but hahaha I'mnot going lie its crap :sweating:
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Re: Lights In My Eyes [TRACK 3]

Postby SG. » Oct 3rd, '11, 18:59

Thank you very much, Menzo. :flower:
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Re: Lights In My Eyes [TRACK 3]

Postby Sam. » Oct 3rd, '11, 22:55

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IDK what to say but this piece failed to impress me one bit.The flow was good but not that consistent at all.You did place One syllable words just to get the flow but that didn't do you any good.

The content was too simple and seemed unstructered and needs proper work.

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Good verse.Nice quoatbles lines you had.You did nice justice to the concept.Keep at it.
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Re: Lights In My Eyes [TRACK 3]

Postby Mr.DGAF » Oct 3rd, '11, 22:59

Sam. wrote:Mr. DGAF
IDK what to say but this piece failed to impress me one bit.The flow was good but not that consistent at all.You did place One syllable words just to get the flow but that didn't do you any good.

The content was too simple and seemed unstructered and needs proper work.



Damn. Okay, I'll definitely work on it, and hopefully improve. Major thanks for the tips though. Rhyming is my biggest probelm atm, at least I think so. Struggling to pull of multi-syllable rhymes. Maybe you can check my other stuff I've done recently whenever you can, and see if maybe this was just a bad verse or if I'm not going to be successful with this writing thing.
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Re: Lights In My Eyes [TRACK 3]

Postby Sam. » Oct 3rd, '11, 23:05

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Sam. wrote:Mr. DGAF
IDK what to say but this piece failed to impress me one bit.The flow was good but not that consistent at all.You did place One syllable words just to get the flow but that didn't do you any good.

The content was too simple and seemed unstructered and needs proper work.



Damn. Okay, I'll definitely work on it, and hopefully improve. Major thanks for the tips though. Rhyming is my biggest probelm atm, at least I think so. Struggling to pull of multi-syllable rhymes. Maybe you can check my other stuff I've done recently whenever you can, and see if maybe this was just a bad verse or if I'm not going to be successful with this writing thing.

Multi-syllable rhyming is not that Important always ,look @ Slugs or Spoonfull's work not that strong on the rhyming but damn the way they say there things is simple and effective.
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