One Hit Wonder (Second Verse Added)

[Mr.DGAF]

This'll be a two-three verse piece, but I've only got one verse done so far. I'll post the rest when I can finish it up, but this piece is basically with no purpose other than to try and get out of my comfort zone.

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Instigating with some women, see the girl I might like
Invitation was extended, you can be my world tonight
Instant hating was a given, her guy seems a little tight
Distant gazing now he’s tripping, then he starts to pick a fight
I don’t care enough to bother, I don’t dare fuck with this “model”
So I step out for some water, but I can’t forget this braud yo,
She wasn’t even the hottest, to be honest, she was modest
Not no goddess worth the problems that her man was really starting
But I’m startled when she walks up, is this chick some kinda stalker?
She approaches with a smile, I’m apprehensive but I’ll try her
Smoke some roaches for a while, she’s defensive but I’m high babe,
Then we get out to my drive way, nothings getting up in my way,
I’m hitting up those hind cheeks, getting brain like she’s a mind freak
Getting freaky, we can try things, feeling kinky? You can ride me
Finish up then kick her out, she wants some more but she can bounce
Respect for her? Don’t have an ounce, Expect the world? Get out my house

She’s looking for love, she’s in the wrong place
Sent from above, I can see her long face
Itching for air, she wants some big lover
Bitch I don’t care, you’re a one hit wonder

I’m sitting home alone, on my throne, drinking patron
In a zone, thinking “oh, what ever happened to that ho?”
She don’t ever call no mo’, maybe she simply just forgot
I hear a knock, look at the clock, its twelve at night, “what the fuck?”
So I check it with a quick glance, when I see it with my eyes
The bitch is chilling with a pick-axe, just imagine my surprise
When I see her and she is strapped, she lets out a little cry
“You will never get this shit back, get ready to fucking die!”
She swings with all her might, cracks the door with one try
I bring a gun from out the back, her attack will go awry
She’s got a gleam inside her eye, of a maniacal murderer
It’s been too many nights and I hadn’t heard a word of her
Absurd of her, to barge into my house bringing a weapon
I pull out a millimeter, should have seen her, wasn’t guessing
That I’d be wrecking her obsession of me quickly with a gesture
Use my gun and kill the trick, steal her shit and dump the rest o' her
Hope nobody peeped that shit, and if they did they won’t say
Cause they can sleep with the fish, getting away like O.J.

She’s looking for love, she’s in the wrong place
Sent from above, I can see her long face
Itching for air, she wants some big lover
Bitch I don’t care, you’re a one hit wonder

[JamaicanPattlez]

Pretty decent, I like it. I wanna see the full product before I can give a true feedback, but what you have there is pretty good.

[Mr.DGAF]

Thanks man. I should get the rest of this up by tomorrow, if I'm lucky.

[JamaicanPattlez]

Thanks man. I should get the rest of this up by tomorrow, if I'm lucky.

No rush man. Longer to you take to work on it, the better it should be, right? I'm fine with it.

[Mr.DGAF]

Thanks man. I should get the rest of this up by tomorrow, if I'm lucky.

No rush man. Longer to you take to work on it, the better it should be, right? I'm fine with it.

Got the second verse up, and I like it a lot more than the first one. But whatever, I'll let you guys decide.