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Love of his life

Postby Mr.DGAF » Oct 6th, '11, 23:36

I dunno, felt like diving out into some stuff I hadn't done before. And no, this is not a diss, following the recent trend.

He spent thirty years in prison, the dirty tears were a given
His worries, fears and ambitions all vanished, they’re disappearing
And he’s hearing from the outside world his downtime girl is leaving
He fights the urge to write his girl and ask her if she’s cheating
How could he know, now should he go, and see just what she’s doing?
Or just be patient, plus he’s praying, but there’s something brewing
She’s choosing to fuck other guys, it seems his mind will go insane
Inside his brain, despite the pain, he manages to write her name
Scribbles all his heart inside this letter that he wants to send
Dribbles all in parts about he’s better as he flaunts his pen
Sends it to his lover thinking “man I guess it all depends”
Maybe she’ll respond with exclamation that she’s wanting him
Or maybe she’ll take the time, as he’s waiting for her visit
While he’s sitting, rotting in this shit hole that’s known as prison
It’s his vision to make it out real soon, parole’s in three days
Even though it seems crazed, he hopes that everything’s the same
Praying that nothing has changed, hope he’s got something to gain
But when the time to leave came, he was riddled with disdain
He got out and came on home and on the lawn lays a note
Then all his hopes, as he choked, evaporated like some smoke


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Last edited by Mr.DGAF on Dec 7th, '11, 01:26, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Love of his life

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Oct 7th, '11, 20:39

You know, I kinda got the idea for my When In Rome piece from this, haha. I just had forgotten to feed ya earlier. :sweating: My bad! Anyhoo, I like this piece, some real talk in this. Rhyming was decent, flow was nice, I liked it. :y: Keep up the good work, man!
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Re: Love of his life

Postby Words » Oct 7th, '11, 21:00

Rhymes were dope as hell
Or maybe she’ll take the time, as he’s waiting for her visit
While he’s sitting, rotting in this shit hole that’s known as prison

Probably my favorite part^ :y: :y:
Flowed really well too, and your word choice made it easy to picture in my mind as well
Good work :D
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