Hold up

[Words]

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[WorDs]
I am able to flip a table made of maple and kill Abel, I'm like Kain with violence fueled by shameful basic cable.
Re-born from these ashes last April, WorDs is not a myth or fable. I ignited my fire and broke my damn cage-up.
With heinous reign, that bring pain thus. Plus enough brain to crush opposition that wants to beef or blood-lust.
My cranium is stronger than titanium. Brain cells, I'm play'n games with em, so much I'm change'n this game with em.
My fame is none, but I'm gonna change it son. To get all these people to follow from whack rappers who spit it dumb.

[Blowfish]
Wait just hold up-
What are you saying in those?
Can you please go slow mo-
So I can follow you bro?
(WorDs) NOOOOOOO

[WorDs]
I've built my perimeters, this is WorDs area. Here, I can damage ya. Unless you follow, then I'm gonna jam with ya.
I fell from the bottom and landed on top. Twisted words impossible and I won't stop. You fan'd pop instead of hip-hop? Then I hope you drop
We're not the same, more than on levels of insane, but your rhymes you brandish are lame, what a shame.
You're just so tame, my lines make yours look like nursery sayings. And yours make mine look like ominus engravings.
I got a craving to make a name, and achieve more than fame, raid the game, flip out on any MC when I go insane.

[Blowfish]
Wait just hold up-
What were you saying in those?
Can you please go slow mo-
So I can follow you bro?
(WorDs) NOOOOO

[Mr.DGAF]

I like this man, though the length of the bars makes it a bit difficult to pick up the flow. Which is just because the lines run on to another line, not to say that your flow is off. The rhyming was awesome on this, that first line, more specifically the first half, was awesome. Multies everywhere, I liked this.

Return the Feed?

[Sam.]

Hmmm..good drop there brah !Needed to be bigger ,but never mind that.The multis on this was dope as fuck which made this flow marvelously.The way you placed the multis made the fact of having longs bars ignorable.

Keep at it brah !

[Words]

Buuuuuummmmmmmp!

[Jdubem]

This is good shit man. I especially liked the way you ended them.

[Words]

2nd bump

[Sam.]

FYO give feed and take have some in return ,that's the Rule here man.

[Words]

FYO give feed and take have some in return ,that's the Rule here man.

I give feed....
But if i need to give more I will.

[mdemaz]

've built my perimeters, this is WorDs area. Here, I can damage ya. Unless you follow, then I'm gonna jam with ya.
I fell from the bottom and landed on top. Twisted words impossible and I won't stop. You fan'd pop instead of hip-hop? Then I hope you drop

Lot's of hidden punches in here.

Great piece.

[SG.]

Lots of multis in here, excellent. Long bars can make it hard, so you could work on making it easier to read. But that's not really significantly damaging to the quality of the piece.

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