Something on my mind

[JamaicanPattlez]

How do we know if God really exists?
How do we show Cops scheminglybitch?
You can't say for sure, and we all look for proof,
Stress is up the roof 'cause the guess made you goof,
Do we even know what's really right and what's wrong?
I'm not seeing hope you feel me, spite's got me drawn,
Why is it that girls just love to diss each other,
How come they don't learn she's just after Britney's brother?
And why is it always guys that act like douchebags,
It's no surprise, we love to lie, and laugh like prude fags,
Everywhere I go, I see deceit and defeat,
Head me to the life store, cause I need a receipt,
These girls look like plastic, no wonder they're fake,
And Earl's mom got so spastic, now he's under the 'quate,
All I ever see is whores, retards and fools,
But I'm part of the horde, so I guess that just makes me one too.

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[Sam.]

This is pretty decent brah and I liked it.It's not as charming as your other drops but you did your thing properly.When I say properly I mean ,there was no forced Rhyming ,Structure & Flow were on point.The content is some thing that we all know ,It's like a universal truth how girls are and how they react.I think I've understood the verse correctly ,correct me if I'm wrong.


Keep slayin 'em.

[ThomasJ]

This was pretty good, although I feel like I've written that exact same verse like a dozen times. lol

Technically it was great.

[JamaicanPattlez]

This is pretty decent brah and I liked it.It's not as charming as your other drops but you did your thing properly.When I say properly I mean ,there was no forced Rhyming ,Structure & Flow were on point.The content is some thing that we all know ,It's like a universal truth how girls are and how they react.I think I've understood the verse correctly ,correct me if I'm wrong.


Keep slayin 'em.

Yeah, this one I just wanted to write, y'know? I get so annoyed with shit today. Thanks!

@TJ Haha this type of shit bugs me!

[ThomasJ]

@TJ Haha this type of shit bugs me!

Yeah, me too, but what I meant was, me writing about this type of stuff so many times prevented me from fully enjoying this. haha

[Mr.DGAF]

I liked this a lot man. I get into your stuff a lot, and this was pretty good. The idea/topic has been done a lot, but there's a reason for that and it's cool to see how you pulled it off. The structure is kinda iffy, but it flowed really well so I guess that's no big deal. I liked the second half more for some reason, starting with the line about guys being douchebags. That bar was nice, man.






Hey Thomas, would you mind peeping some work I've done? If not it's cool, but figured the more people I can get to give advice, the more I can improve.

[ThomasJ]

Hey Thomas, would you mind peeping some work I've done? If not it's cool, but figured the more people I can get to give advice, the more I can improve.

I'm seriously too tired to give proper feed right now. haha

I'll do it tomorrow morning though.

[Mr.DGAF]

Hey Thomas, would you mind peeping some work I've done? If not it's cool, but figured the more people I can get to give advice, the more I can improve.

I'm seriously too tired to give proper feed right now. haha

I'll do it tomorrow morning though.

Aha, thanks man.

[JamaicanPattlez]

I liked this a lot man. I get into your stuff a lot, and this was pretty good. The idea/topic has been done a lot, but there's a reason for that and it's cool to see how you pulled it off. The structure is kinda iffy, but it flowed really well so I guess that's no big deal. I liked the second half more for some reason, starting with the line about guys being douchebags. That bar was nice, man.






Hey Thomas, would you mind peeping some work I've done? If not it's cool, but figured the more people I can get to give advice, the more I can improve.

Thanks brah. Lol it's a done topic, but still important.