Zabe - Forgive Me (feat. Geno)

[SG.]

Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=l7LLpS_Wz6Y

[Verse 1 - Zabe]

I'm like a reckless gambler, now checklist rambler
Karma's coming back rabid, I wrecked this stand-up
But this ain't comedic, I straight done goofed
To God I pleaded, but you need and want proof
I already said sorry, I have no more to give you
So Ma, don't punish me for leaving you in a home on rental
And goddamn Eve, name changed for legal reasons
I'm obsessed, like Pippa Middleton in regal season

[Chorus]

Lord forgive me, for I've sinned
Over and over again just to stay, on top
I recall memories, filled, with sin
Over and over again.. and again

[Verse 2 - Geno]

Head hits the pillow with a thought of my widow,
I'm calm when I drop all the bombs I deliver,
But I stopped, never listened, just caught up in business,
Now distraught, it was wrong I forgot she existed,
Death...
Is what I face, it's a shame that my mate,
Has to wait in the wake of my faith being placed,
With the waste..and can't be saved,
It's this game that will take her away,
From me..
And this the result of a richocheted flow,
Ask the sickened, they know, why didn't they show,
How to finish it though? Now we're caught in the limbo,
Wicked with woe, it's even hot when the wind blows,
God with the pencil, but nothing down here,
Now broken inside as a husband I feel,
That a token of mine won't get lovin' this year,
It just up and went here, now it's lookin' kinda filthy,
Despite my faults.. will you be pushin' to forgive me?
Help me..

[Chorus]

Lord forgive me, for I've sinned
Over and over again just to stay, on top
I recall memories, filled, with sin
Over and over again.. and again

[Verse 3 - Zabe]

And now that you understand how Geno feels
Realise everyone's the same, stinging like a sea of eels
To compensate for my past, I start procrastinating
It's often said war might last if you won't pass the baiting
Yeah, life's a war, against the will of your soul
My feet perched on the windowsill of my home
Fucking Christ, you can forgive me, if you really want to
Or hold it against me, dissing me, where's your feelings lost to?

[Chorus x2]

Lord forgive me, for I've sinned
Over and over again just to stay, on top
I recall memories, filled, with sin
Over and over again.. and again

LOF
Zabe: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=133585
Geno: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=133505

[Words]

Dope work, you guys both did an excellant job with flow. Both of Zabe's verses, and Geno's flowed really well. I had to read back over Geno's verse once, pauses threw me off a little bit. But once I realized what he was doing with them, it flowed nicely. Zabe and Geno
Rhyming was good, really no criticism here, all around good work. You guys work well together.

[Atone]

Zabe i didn't really get the first line, but the rest of this was real good, i thought Geno's part was a bit longer but then i realised he only has 1 verse lol, i like this tho, yall are a good team

[SG.]

Zabe i didn't really get the first line, but the rest of this was real good, i thought Geno's part was a bit longer but then i realised he only has 1 verse lol, i like this tho, yall are a good team

First line's a reference to My Name Is Earl.

Thanks you two.

[SG.]

Ignorance is bliss...

TILL I CHOP YOUR FUCKING HEAD OFF!!!!

In all seriousness though, bump.

[Sam.]

Both of you went equally hard on this one, none of you managed to out pace your partner, this shows the chemistry that both of you managed to bring forward.

Zabe had some clever lines that seem to be a blend of thoughts that were preconceived and written after a lot of thinking. Geno on the other hand had a deep storyline with Multis that went of the roof, liked the pauses that you took, made the flow more smooth. No criticism.

Keep slayin 'em.

[Mr.DGAF]

Hm, thought I fed this earlier, but since I didn't, I'll pass my thoughts on it along.

Zabe, got damn bruh, you're getting quite good. There's still parts where the rhyming is a bit simple, which isn't a bad thing all the time, but you're game has improve drastically. From flow, to multies, to simply expressing yourself as a writer. You've improved heaps man, that first verse was quite nice.

"To compensate for my past, I start procrastinating"

That was quite clever man.

Geno, I liked your stuff as well. You're one of the better writer's here, and I appreciate that you went with a unique flow here. The pauses man, I really felt those. But when I first started reading your verse, got that No Apologies feel from it haha. Which is definitely a good thing.

[SG.]

A lot of the time my rhyming gets simpler because I'm bored or tired. I thought I wrote two 16's then I realised I wrote 8's and couldn't be bothered changing them, that's how sleep-deprived I am. There's a track I'm doing at the moment with Manix and Cream where I've actually had fun writing for the first time in a while. So look forward to that.

[Man1x]

A lot of the time my rhyming gets simpler because I'm bored or tired. I thought I wrote two 16's then I realised I wrote 8's and couldn't be bothered changing them, that's how sleep-deprived I am. There's a track I'm doing at the moment with Manix and Cream where I've actually had fun writing for the first time in a while. So look forward to that.

You mean after months of me publishing my verse y'all gonna finally put it out? SWEET!

[J.R.]

Both went hard. Geno> Zabe By just a bit. You both killed it, Zabe , Geno, Nice work. You should collab more.

[JamaicanPattlez]

Can't criticise, dope. Zabe, you're improving a lot. Keep it up!

[SG.]

Little bump. Jus a lil' one.

[Wreck]

Nice multies Zabe, nice concept, Geno's verse was too simple, not enough to it imo. First two lines didn't even rhyme either.

But I liked the piece overall.

[Wreck]

Nice multies Zabe, nice concept, Geno's verse was too simple, not enough to it imo. First two lines didn't even rhyme either.

But I liked the piece overall.

LOL didn't even rhyme.

They didn't.

[Sam.]

Nice multies Zabe, nice concept, Geno's verse was too simple, not enough to it imo. First two lines didn't even rhyme either.

But I liked the piece overall.

LOL didn't even rhyme.

They didn't.

LOL dude.
widow/deliver(delivour) ~ It did Rhyme to me this way. Heard of bending words? Accents?