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Geno - Throwaway Verse

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Re: Geno - Throwaway Verse

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Nov 16th, '11, 07:18

Very well done. Yet another beat I know of. :tounge2: Jokes aside, I can never really criticise your work.

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Re: Geno - Throwaway Verse

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Nov 16th, '11, 07:20

Geno wrote:I hope you got that reference. :shifty:



It was obvious doe. :laughing: That was awesome.
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Re: Geno - Throwaway Verse

Postby RainMan44 » Nov 16th, '11, 10:46

I like this, this is very different from your other stuff. You showed some versatility which is always good, so props on that. :y:

I really liked the content of this as well. The rhymes were tight as usual, and I also noticed some inner rhymes.

"She grabs the mace and shoves at me, a fashion statement, lucky me."

Was that intentional?

This was a good piece, only problem is I had a bit difficulty picking up the flow of it in the beginning, but I'm sure you know how to flow to your own piece.

Nice shit for a throwaway verse man, keep it up. :b:


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Re: Geno - Throwaway Verse

Postby Innovation » Nov 16th, '11, 13:35

Great verse, I enjoyed it. Typically, the rhyming was great throughout.

"I'm just gonna strike a pose, maybe I'll invite the hoes,
To put me out, I'll strip it down and suffer from a vital blow"

The multi's there made that flow very well. The whole thing flowed well but this in particular was one of the standouts.

Great verse man.
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Re: Geno - Throwaway Verse

Postby Sam. » Nov 16th, '11, 20:36

Enough of this hoe hating verses man, let go of it. I know this is a "Throwaway Verse" but come on, this is nth time I'm reading this bitch slapping type of shit. I know you're mad by now and want to say some thing harsh about me, chill man I was just getting my point across in a sarcastic/joking way, that's all. :D

The basic thing is that the content was very much repetitive and you know it, I've seen you touch a lot of different themes lately and all of a sudden this???

Enough of the hate doe, time for some worthy feed.

This was a funny verse and had a lot of humorous material in it.In fact it was the highlight of these piece. You just wasted some of the best Multis that you used by calling this a "Throwaway Verse". Don't underestimate yourself man, you're capable of doing much more and this is not a garbage material that you label it as a "Throwaway Verse". You've proved yourself as a dope writer on lot of occasions.

The Flow, Mutis were super dope and I noticed some dope inner rhymes that connected the previous bar properly, still call it a "Throwaway Verse"? Change the title man, for me. :flutter:

Summing up here, what I want you to do is try different themes and write over it.

Keep slayin 'em. :y:
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Re: Geno - Throwaway Verse

Postby Sam. » Nov 16th, '11, 21:58

Geno wrote:It was mainly throwaway not because the rhyming, technique or flow were weak, but because of the content like you mentioned.

It's just.. random stuff I've already touched on, so I'm not gonna use it. It's a throwaway lol. :wave:

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Re: Geno - Throwaway Verse

Postby Man1x » Nov 16th, '11, 23:05

What can I say, dope shit Geno as always. I'd like to see you do other concepts though, but I understand this a throw away so that doesn't apply here.
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Re: Geno - Throwaway Verse

Postby Spyder » Nov 17th, '11, 22:53

see why this is a throw away cause it didnt really even have a vague direction.
but of course flow and multies are there and i saw the humor.
obv not gonna critique too much cause its a throwaway and we know why.

but thats a good throwaway, lets you know how good your real releases are :y:
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