I Love Spitting (Multies & Metas)

[Wreck]

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I love spitting, fuck thugs & snitches, you pussies easy to fuck with just like drunken bitches
I bought OJ some gloves & mittens, if trshady is my family, my blood is the sickest
Voice's deep like Gregorian Chants, if i'm the biggest dick, bitch why you exploring my pants?
I got a sick car- the Delorian's advanced, I'm Worley, this is the story of Vance
I know this girl likes to get her ass licked, dog, I also tell her I got some fantastic balls
Some chew toys, you can trash them all, cause I'll stuff her like Thanksgiving, then laugh it off
Therefore, call me Pavlov, you're messing with a true Viking like Jared Allen
You're scared & unbalanced, this bar's a stretch like Sarah Palin's pussy when she's para sailing
What up to Zoey Hollaway, Rest In Peace to Joey Valentine
and if you didn't know me, blow me, because I own Palestine
I'll put your head on a swivel, break some bread in the middle
Take some meds in a little, after I fuck my bitch & caress on those nipples
I got the Yaowa troops, I know the COB & Internet soldiers from Crook & Joe
I can dodge a bullet like Brooklyn yo, i'm on fire with this money like I cooked the dough
This is Wreck signing off, the AIM & skype ways
I'll kick you in the nuts with my right leg, y'all are like Sandusky, roll with a "kid" like "Night & Day"
I'm blowing up the stars, and taking "Astro" with me
I'm not a bitch like that asshole Britney, now wait for this fastball, let's see

[Mr.DGAF]

Oh shit breh. The multies in this, my goodness. What should I say? The multies make the flow phenomenal, the content was executed really nicely and there were some really funny/witty lines in this.

[Wreck]

Oh shit breh. The multies in this, my goodness. What should I say? The multies make the flow phenomenal, the content was executed really nicely and there were some really funny/witty lines in this.

Thanks bro, I truly appreciate it. And haha thanks .

Meh, a lot of your rhymes seemed pretty forced and I didn't like the flow past the 1st half.

Put it to a beat, and it rhymes perfect. You were probably going over it in your head to a slow beat; wouldn't work like that.

I wrote this to a beat like The Illest by Slaughterhouse.

[Wreck]

I dunno how any of the lines are forced though. Give me an example.

[Wreck]

1. "Put it to a beat" smh. You can't just say that.
2. If you wrote it to a beat, post the beat.
3. Here's your examples:

Therefore, call me Pavlov, you're messing with a true Viking like Jared Allen
You're scared & unbalanced, this bar's a stretch like Sarah Palin's pussy when she's para sailin

Blue doesn't rhyme with the red. Even though it's supposed to. You're right, that bars a stretch.

This is Wreck signing off, the AIM & skype ways
I'll kick you in the nuts with my right leg, y'all are like Sandusky, roll with a "kid" like "Night & Day"

Red is off. How do you screw up a 2 syllable rhyme? The flow in this part is awful.

By the way, structure usually doesn't matter, but your structure is really weird. It shouldn't have 4 bars in the form of 2. Yes I went over the beat with it.

When Em rapped in Relapse he used accents to make words rhymed that normally didn't. That's what I did with the Jared Allen line. And yes it rhymes. The line isn't that long when you put it to a beat, I see guys that stretch bars on songs a lot.

I don't have to post the beat for people that get the flow, because they hum it in their head and make note of how the flow was structured.

[Wreck]

How did I mess that part up?

skype-ways
night (&) day

it rhymes to me

[Wreck]

You criticize me for not rhyming, but can't accept the fact that you can't rhyme yourself.

Smh.

I'm not gonna argue with you. I'm just supposed to KNOW you wrote it to a beat that's not slow (which in fact it is slower than most), and that you used accents. That's just your damn excuse for horrible multies, and if it isn't, I suppose you meant to say you bit Em on Taking My Ball with the Sarah Palin line.

And the last line flows awkwardly because of the "&".

How is it an excuse? You wouldn't call it an excuse if Em wrote it. It's the same thing. People do it a lot. It's basically a verse off a song I wrote, that's why the flow is the way it is. You're right, I should of noted that, so people had it in the back of their minds when they read it.

And I don't see any of these lines that don't rhyme. I put the & in their so it made sense.

But bs here aside, thank you for the feed, I appreciate it.

[Wreck]

No, it's not an excuse in audio because I can HEAR it.

I'll release the song once I finish it, and see what you say, cause I aint dumb, I know what flows and what rhymes. I respect your feed, and opinion, but goddamn, c'mon. It all depends on the beat, and how you execute. Would you agree with that at least.

[Sam.]

Geno pretty much sums up my thoughts on this.The Multis that he pointed out are just few examples, there are more of them. There are Multis but they are a stretch as far as I tried to do justice with them. Even with the accent it's hard, I know a lot of accent's because I've talked to people with different kind of accents. It's not your fault, this happens when you're writing and suddenly a dope though comes to your mind and you want to put it in the dopest manner with lot of Multis but don't find words to do it. Content wise you nailed it. Don't worry man, I use the UK Accent a lot and it poses a problem to the feeders.

Keep slayin 'em ~ Eminem

[Spyder]

actually if u spit this to audio you can make it work easily, geno doesnt do audio so wouldnt know

the extra and will be under spoken and not emphasized so the sentence makes sense itll catch the beat
and if he uses correct intonation itll sounds right

[Sam.]

I know

actually if u spit this to audio you can make it work easily, geno doesnt do audio so wouldnt know

the extra and will be under spoken and not emphasized so the sentence makes sense itll catch the beat
and if he uses correct intonation itll sounds right

I was thinking the same if you ask me, even then it's hard at places. I do the same at times but..this case is a little different.

[Spyder]

um i said you dont do audio cause... you dont do audio?

gimme a track youve recorded... oh wait no mic, no looks like you dont do audio

im not saying you wouldnt be good at, im saying u dont.
that is all that is being said here

[Spyder]

im saying if you were familiar enough with it you would realize those lines you pointed out
can sounds good or normal in audio if done right.
it text no, because the reader wont automatically pick up on it

whereas if u HEARD it first, then READ it ud know what he was doing.

ignorance was not conveyed it my posts. just obvious facts

[Mr.DGAF]

I think the thing with bending words is that it should be used very little with writtens. The reader should be able to decipher what rhymes and what doesn't quickly. I read through this once, on my phone so the structure didn't matter as it had shortened the bars to fit my screen, and it seemed to flow pretty nice. But oh well.

But yeah, unless you post it to audio so we have something to work with, then who knows what's bent and what not? Reading lyrics from Relapse, without knowing that it was accented, would make the work far less exciting.

Just my two cents

[Wreck]

im saying if you were familiar enough with it you would realize those lines you pointed out
can sounds good or normal in audio if done right.
it text no, because the reader wont automatically pick up on it

whereas if u HEARD it first, then READ it ud know what he was doing.

ignorance was not conveyed it my posts. just obvious facts

Thank you, my point exactly.