Geno - Rain

[Sam.]

It’ been a minute man since you dropped something. But I must know; is this part of your “New Geno EP”? I’m asking you because I’ve to link this in that “Writer’s Vault” thread under a proper heading.

Feedback:
Nice pair of stories. At first I though that the 2nd Verse was by someone else then I realized that it was another story altogether. And yes I must appreciate the story telling skill that you managed to bring forth. The 1st Verse was you talking about a certain character and his problems, and also about you witnessing the whole happening. The 2nd Verse takes the situation back to you; here you poetically managed to relate the whole thing with what’s happening with you and around you. I think this what you were trying to say through this piece, correct me if I’m wrong. If my interpretation of this is correct then this is one hell of an Idea to present a story.

There are things that I liked even more about this and the thing was the actual Rhyming, the Multi’s were on point and it didn’t sound as filler. By filler I mean that you used the least amount of Multi’s to get your message across and tell your story properly and didn’t overdo it. That’s really cool if you ask me son. I used to struggle with this and had to add more Rhymes to make my story appealing. That resulted in the story getting elongated and boring; I’ve improved and moved on from doing that though. Seeing you do it made me bring my experience with this forward.

I loved the Beat, It helped to Flow through the piece easily. Good work, keep at it.

[Sam.]

You didn't Ans my question.