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[SliK]

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[Sam.]

I really liked the Multis that you used, but doing that(The way you did it) made the content pretty random. The Rhyme Scheme was not consistent throughout the verse, use the same Rhyme Scheme for a set of "2/3/4/6/8" Bars to get a proper flow and Rhythm. This is a Text piece so changing the Flow continuously wont help. Inner Multi are the things that you shouldn't aim for right now, focus on the ending Multis as of now. Doing that keeps the content from going random and acts as a practice ground to make those Multis more deep and complex. Once you're comfortable with it, only then go for Inners.

[J.R.]

Very basic rhymes, but I enjoyed it nonetheless. Improve flow/multis, you'll be alot better.

[SliK]

Thanks for the feed guys, next time I'll drop something with some substance and definitely work on the flow.