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Set Fire to Rain

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Set Fire to Rain

Postby Spyder » Dec 12th, '11, 19:47

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I was eager dreamin close in your arms
But that evil being wasn’t exposin her heart
I know that its hard, you gotta take a risk
But you break it quick, it’s just the way you live
No changing it
But tell me, was it really me that made you split?
I met you broken down, I made you rise
You crave to fly and I gave you skies,
But the change of tides, did u plan the shit?
After smooth sailin you abandoned ship…
Thought I handled it, but you know I cant forget
How I gave you my all and you ran and split.
The damage is, more than you could fathom
Now I see people like us, I just laugh at em.
How could I let that happen? Well never again
Honestly right now, I think ud look better dead.
Just bein honest, something you never did
And when I think about, I start to feel better then…
Again and again, you ruined my life
So if you’ve moved on to new dude then its fine.
Ruin his mind, you came to me stressed
Now you’re the reason for the pain in my chest.

After four years I hang my head in defeat
I mean everything that’s been said on this beat
You wreckin my dreams, I cant shut my eyes
Without seein you, you touched my life.
But fuck if I, lay down trampled and done
It got so bad, I never planned to succumb,
Damn it you won, I still hate your ass
Grab our picture smash it and break the glass.
Everything was nice when I take your hand
When my knees shake you would make me stand.
Tell me whats change ive stayed the same
All the good in you I paved the way.
Day to day we would crave the chase
But you went and just fuckin changed your pace.
But I moved on, been in denial for years
I set fire to rain and dried all my tears,
Thoughts eased as my mind it veers
And I get past some of my wildest fears,
Hear I was thinkin I was cursed and doomed
I didn’t wanna hear the words, were through.
I got over pain in a verse or two
But I hope that it hurt much worse for you.
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Re: Set Fire to Rain

Postby Sam. » Dec 12th, '11, 20:44

:worship:

I never would have dreamed in a million years I would see you do such a piece like this, look at the impact of this. This is definitely one of those tracks where every word; every line matters and is necessary to do justice to the Topic. You did an excellent job with this, at times I felt that this had an touch of something what Sadistik would do. Some of the lines were really poetic, in short they were really deep and the feelings came out very well. On the same note I would also say that since you wrote this to a beat, the concept was a little stretched at places, I can't exactly point that out though, but yeah(No that much of a deal). Technically this was dope as fuck and the execution of the Multis was fabulous.

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Re: Set Fire to Rain

Postby Spyder » Dec 12th, '11, 21:18

thanks bro :worship:
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Re: Set Fire to Rain

Postby Spyder » Dec 15th, '11, 18:46

bump :coffee:
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