I Spit (Freestyle) (Track 7)

[Mr.DGAF]

Wanted to switch up my style, experimented with multiple different flows with this one, but didn't want to stick to a particular topic. Anyway, let me know what you think.


Feed:http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=144115
Beat http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AV1Ak9_yXUY&feature=related



I spit freestyles harder than a motherfucking teen male
When he sees a female approaching and she reach down
Cleavage pulls her tee down, like it was a rebound
Tell me who could beat down a beat like me now?
So go ahead and tweet 'bout how I beast out on a track
Put it down on it's back, pound it out till it's flat
Then around it I'll craft many magical raps
With an asthmatic flow, am I spazmatic? No
But I snap then I blow, what a fantastic show
I put on for the fans in the stands who clap in support
They're laughing for sho', but it's what's in your pants that's a joke
Question me and I'll answer with force, I don't fuck with the lames
Who can suck but then claim to be crushing the game
You're just stuck with the same old shit, need a crutch and a cane
Once I'm done with ya mane, they will rush to your aid
Then they'll forget your name, like they got alzheimer's
But I'm an all timer, I'm staying in this bitch till I get to crawl higher
And leave y'all behind us like you was the rearview mirror on my Scion
Who, what, when, where and tell me why ya hating on me, or wish I'm dying
That's fucked up but trust yup I will not give up or quit to cry some
I'll be fine hun, you couldn't touch me if you were my arm
Dude, stop trying, you are lying if you think you are flyer
Who would I be to let you slide without a shot on wax you bitch?
So try and take a shot at me, and trust me, I will scratch that itch

[CrashBand]

Great rhyming man. You're a pretty god writer. Not a lot of critique.

I wouldn't mind seeing a concept from you rather then just spitting bars. (even though you do this well). Because I think it could be pretty good as your flow and rhyming are a given but your wordplay was good.

I like your simile from the first line. How it just keeps ging on for three lines

harder than........" a motherfucking teen male
When he sees a female approaching and she reach down
Cleavage pulls her tee down, like it was a rebound"

I really love this technique, Em used to do this heaps. Like in forgot about dre
"I'm harder than ......."me tryna park a Dodge
But I'm drunk as fuck
Right next to a humungous truck in a two car garage
Hoppin out with two broken legs tryna walk it off
Fuck you too bitch call the cops
I'ma kill you and them loud ass muthafuckin barkin dogs
And when the cops came through
Me and Dre stood next to a burnt down house
With a can full of gas and a hand full of matches
And still weren't found out"

obviously a bit longer than three lines though

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Wow, Awesome man. I liked all the similes and metaphors, everything i have read from you has been quality dude, keep it up! Also I like that you are experimenting with some different things. That will help in the long run for sure!! Way to go.

[Mr.DGAF]

Haha thanks guys, really appreciate the feed.

[Atone]

pretty dope,

"With an asthmatic flow, am I spazmatic? No
But I snap then I blow, what a fantastic show"

this was one of my favorites in this

plus the opening three lines was clever, all together this was pretty damn good

[Mr.DGAF]

Thanks man.

Shameless bump for the new (old haha) writers to check out.

[Ka0t1c]

I don't fuck with the lames
Who can suck but then claim to be crushing the game
You're just stuck with the same old shit, need a crutch and a cane
Once I'm done with ya mane, they will rush to your aid

that's my fave part for the free flow, you've got some good stuff in here worth keepin