[Track 7] Tyler

[J.R.]

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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vlbqI_L_Yo4

[Verse 1]
I'm trying to think of something to start with..
Rhyimg lines in my head just doesn't spark it..
sitting here thinking of you and I break down,
Tyler, why were you the one chosen to go now?
I remember you're face, you're eyes but not your voice,
and I would remember the latter if I had the choice,
if only for one reason, and that reason would be,
I would probably end up pretending that your speaking to me..
You were like my friend when really no one else wanted to be.
Tyler, Your an angel now and I know your serving the G
But I'd do anything to have you back down here with me..
I'm tearing up as I write this and then type this..
Hoping finally somebody will like this..
I remember even as a christian, Tyler, you supported my raps.
You were the only one who told me to go for it and not look back.
You gave me hope when no one could, growing up with you only..
Saying I'm now growing up alone is true, I'm growing up too lonely..


[Verse 2]
I remember that day god took you from us,
Staring from my window, I see you in the truck..
Being hauled off in a stretcher, I ask my mom if it was you
I'm like 10 or 11, she says what i thought was true
I turn and cry and just dash off to my room..
My soul burns and dies and i lose all my fumes..
In that moment.. in that instant, I knew that you were gone..
I knew in that second, That something just felt horribly wrong..
You had one of those tubes shoved down your throat,
thats how i knew it was bad, doctors helping you cope..
you couldn't even breathe, how were you gonna survive,
Scary thoughts to be thinking, when I'm barely pass nine..


[Verse 3]
I remember one day..your house, your porch..
we were playing basketball outside on your court..
you were whooping my ass I was used to it i kinda sucked,
I was the fat kid, lets face it, I was that loveable fat fuck..
Anyway, you won like 93-24 and you looked me in the eye and gave me tips,
then you bet me like $50 bucks that you couldn't touch the rim,
you were like 5'11, but I was dumb so i took the bet,
and you won, that's a day that I'll never forget..
you were clever, but you gave me the money back..
I said "You won, here, it's fair and square, ass."
I walked away, pride hurt crying, you stopped me by the shoulder,
you picked me up, put me in the pocket then knocked me over,
you took me home and told my mom about the bet..
my mom get pissed yelled at you and it took me forever to get..
why you did what you did, but i finally get why..
sometimes it takes a really man to swallow his pride..
and admit when he's wrong, you scammed a nine year old outta cash
this songs for you, knowing your gone, ill be fine....love, jack.

[Mr.DGAF]

If this is all true, then damn. Forget all the rhymes and flow and shit. But if I must say,the rhymes were decent, a tiny bit simplistic but ehh. And the flow was pretty easy to pick up. But the emotion is powerful, this is one of the better things I'veseen you write. It's tough to put real events and emotions into words, and even harder to make it flow and rhyme coherently. I salute you just for writing it man.

EDIT: Also it's cool to see you on a beat. I don't remember if I've ever seen you post a piece with a beat before? It may have happened, my memory fails me occasionally.

[J.R.]

All true, he died of an asthma(Spelling incorrect?) attack . Thanks on the emotion. This is something I've wanted to vent about for a long time, and Spyder said I needed to add emotion, i figured it was perfect. Considering I used to be so good at emotion. I've done beats, usually I just count syllables because I don't like taking 3 hours finding a beat to download. Thanks sir

[Eedee]

On pieces like these... fuck rhyming man. You really took the emotion and hit it out the park. I was entrapped in it from start to finish. I can really tell Tyler meant a lot to you; really personal and just... wow. Emotional.

You were able to take what you wanted to say, write it down and rhyme it as well, so good job on that!

This is a really good piece. A lot of things people can connect to: friendship, loss, emotion...

[J.R.]

Thanks
(this isn't a rhyming piece)

[Slim Fiasco]

That was amazing man. And I don't even care if it fits a beat, or if the rhymes are spaced correctly, or if you can flow it right. Fuck that, this was pure emotion and you worded your thoughts perfectly. Great job. And I'm sorry about your loss obviously. I was crashed when a kid from my hood died when he was 13, and we weren't even close friends or nothing, so I can only assume how have you felt.

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

This was a good piece dude I agree with everyone else I liked the emotion and I can really relate and props for even being able to write about it, I can't, I will try to think of things and just tear up, any way love it dude keep it up