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Catastrophic - Talionis

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jun 4th, '12, 23:13

Friendly response to Witness Nostradamus. The CW needs a good spark anyways. :D

Mr. DGAF feed:http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=145661
Eedee feed: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=145661
Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MrZroVideHs

Mr. DGAF; Eedee

[Verse] (:19)

I personally promise to provide exquisite writtens
And in my opinion you'd be in denial if you miss it.

What him and I have is alike to H2O,
Our bond set this place to smoke, so it's great to know

That covalents go together like a Blade that doesn't dare
To pay a tax and now he stay's relaxed behind bars like I put him there!

Picking the magazine that's probably best to send you,
You're living in fantasy, so let us address the issue.

Ironic that we're best at substance, stories might seem wild
To a guy who only rhymes when dropping glorified freestyles

An ironic link that you feed, prick-ish indeed,
Can't even drop a fucking track without thinkin' of me.
What a knee-jerk reaction that you're kicking your feet,
We're like a scab that never heals so if you pick it, it bleeds.
Envision a scene of beef, shit it's got me giggling, see
The riddle in the middle of things is if he's a G?
No! Yeah, it's played but so? I didn't think a little note
That we wrote as a joke would turn into subliminals.

I mean for fuck's sake, my replies were mild,
Just trying to get my side in while I'm defiled.

But I won't act like a child, this stuff is sparking good beef
Between two teams that could use a harder pushing.
We embrace the opportunity, come here, do we get a hug?
You're spewing trash everywhere, let's get rid of the litter bug.
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Re: Catastrophic - Talionis

Postby Eedee » Jun 4th, '12, 23:47

Nice colors, man. :8)
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Re: Catastrophic - Talionis

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Jun 5th, '12, 00:53

Nice nice, Once again I like the duo! cool to see you guys do a diss, I'll have to check out witness nostradamas to see what the response was to but I liked this a lot both of you guys did really good!! keep em coming
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Re: Catastrophic - Talionis

Postby Eedee » Jun 5th, '12, 01:27

^ Thanks man. I think a little friendly war is healthy for CW. :)
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Re: Catastrophic - Talionis

Postby J.R. » Jun 5th, '12, 01:35

This I like, with DGAF taking it. Honestly nothing really to say, add a few more inners, a couple of the lines were stretched but that's about it and good luck. Use emotion, it's what you two are best at, because Ego is best at this shit.
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Re: Catastrophic - Talionis

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jun 5th, '12, 02:07

J.R. wrote:This I like, with DGAF taking it. Honestly nothing really to say, add a few more inners, a couple of the lines were stretched but that's about it and good luck. Use emotion, it's what you two are best at, because Ego is best at this shit.


Thanks man, appreciate the feed. And honestly, we have no problem with Ego. I think they're both really good writers, but some competition isn't a bad thing.

And I respect the emotion thing, but it's not our goal to play to our strengths all the time, you know? A good writer (Pssh, who am I kidding here, I'm a textcee) would want to expand. I agree, these rhyming tracks are Ego's specialty, but we want to try and push them, and I personally will never concede defeat, that's just not me. So if they're better at this, Eedee and I will be working hard to make sure that's arguable. We're just starting, we have our own plans and aren't trying to be Ego in any way. But we want to be as good as them in every fashion.

Sorry for the long-winded explanation, but I get the vibe that maybe it comes across that we're trying to imitate Ego or copy their style, and that's not our intention. They're doing their thing; we're doing ours. :flower:
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