One Girl (Fiasco Day 2)

[SG.]

Beat: J. Cole - Daddy's Little Girl
LOF: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=146167&p=1925097#p1925097

Ever since I was a little boy, there's only been one girl for me
But every time I talked to her, I got burned to the third degree
And I could never understand how she would always blow me off
This is 2012, how can you make me feel like I was hit below the balls?
I see you every day at school, but ain't talked to you in five years
I feel so alone, at times I've come close to crying tears
So I had to put my longsword back in its scabbard
Crawling back into my black pit, getting my penis battered
Then I found out you were a dirty slut, fucking different guys every day
Somehow it made you more attractive, maybe you could go bi, every way
Fuckin', suckin', buckin', c'mon girl, make me feel like Joe Budden
Then you said "I don't like you..." What? "I'm not doin' anything wit you..." So nothin'?
You've fucked everyone in the school, both guys and lesbian girls
How can you say you won't fuck with a MC and thespian of words?
But while I could always feel my emotions for her receding
Turns out she couldn't fuck with me cuz she was growing real feelings

[Slim Fiasco]

Hahah, nice piece man. I loved how you started emoish with there just being one girl and all, but then you went on to make her look like shit. The line about you wondering how she can't fall for a rapper was my favorite, lol.

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Awesome dude, you kept it creative whole time while at the same time keeping the flow good and keeping a multisyllable rhym pattern, It's very interesting how you went from beginning to end like name said I like it a lot dude, very creative! keep it up! this was awesome!

[Mr.DGAF]

I liked the ending. That was a creative way to end it. There were a few instance where I thought you missed a good multie by a syllable or so. And there were other times where I felt like you sacrificed a bit for the multie. But those weren't enough to make me dislike it. You told the story well, I was really impressed in that aspect.

[CrashBand]

Great twist at the end man. NIce concept. Better execution.

Props Zabe.