Fiasco County (Fiasco Day 5)

[Slim Fiasco]

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Inspiration hit me so I decided to make up for not dropping a piece yesterday.

If my life gets a movie I will be living in the OC
Played by Adam Brody, making all my foes flee
Surrounded by hoes b, it’d be as funny as Cosby
I’ll have playboy bunnies running around and OD
With enough money to buy the whole sea, ya dig?
I’ll be big on my raps, spitting ill facts, witty like X
But no drugs so I will be nothing like DM you fags
Will I be the man you do not ask, or you’ll die fast
I never fail tests, only excel and do well with no rest
I make the bell ring ‘cause I’m the definition of best
Always in the winning position doing the Hulk smash
This is the twelfth line, and there’s no sign of stopping
But back to the movie, the villain starts telling lies copping
My style, so I’ll make him fall down like a flopping clown
This is no LA Cippers, I’m a superstar ‘n the mirror flickers
So I’ll have to end this now, and go eat my delicious snickers

[Mr.DGAF]

I liked this man. And may I say, your rhyming improved a lot. There was a decent amount of nice rhymes with the "Brody" scheme. Plus I really liked the flopping Clippers line haha. You've improved with pretty much each drop. This experiment has really pushed a lot of the writers here.

[Slim Fiasco]

I liked this man. And may I say, your rhyming improved a lot. There was a decent amount of nice rhymes with the "Brody" scheme. Plus I really liked the flopping Clippers line haha. You've improved with pretty much each drop. This experiment has really pushed a lot of the writers here.

Haha, thanks man! And yeah, the flopping thing is annoying as fuck, especially with the Clippers, lol. As you know, I usually don't focus on rhyming but this it came naturally like that, so I went with it. Glad you liked it.

[Slim Fiasco]

Yeah I agree with DGAF the Clippers line was hilarious, this is good shit for a freestyle-ish verse cause it feels like the whole thing came out naturally just like you said, great shit mane.

Definitely, this is a piece that I wrote the fastest. I guess it's because I was drunk, so it all just flowed and created itself, lol. And thanks!

[SG.]

This was a good piece, rhyming has improved from your other pieces. As name said, this piece feels very natural, almost like a freestyle, if you know what I mean. Good job.

[Slim Fiasco]

This was a good piece, rhyming has improved from your other pieces. As name said, this piece feels very natural, almost like a freestyle, if you know what I mean. Good job.

I do man. Thanks for the feedback!

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

I too liked the clippers line! awesome piece, I can tell your rhyming has improved a lot man, way to go! this challenge is definitely helping you a lot! Keep it up!

[Slim Fiasco]

I too liked the clippers line! awesome piece, I can tell your rhyming has improved a lot man, way to go! this challenge is definitely helping you a lot! Keep it up!

Haha, it definitely does man, and I'm sure it's the same for all you which makes doing the challenge worth it. My favorite part is that you have a person determine the topic and then you write something that you wasn't going to on regular basis.

[Arabian Shady]

First four rhymes were definitely dope. I allmost pictured K.Dot spittin that kinda stuff.
haha i digg the freestyle. Good set of multi's, neat flow as well.
wiked!

[Slim Fiasco]

First four rhymes were definitely dope. I allmost pictured K.Dot spittin that kinda stuff.
haha i digg the freestyle. Good set of multi's, neat flow as well.
wiked!

Thanks man. First time I get feedback from you, and I want more of this, lol.