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Re: Geno - Floor (Day 6)

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jun 24th, '12, 04:09

Dang. The first four lines' flow was super nice. The word choice for "enigmatic" was perfect. I liked how you came back to the seven whores close to the end, I kinda forgot about them until they came up again. Rhyme scheme was really nice in this, one of the better executions in terms of schemes that I've seen from you since this experiment started. Good stuff.
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Re: Geno - Floor (Day 6)

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Jun 24th, '12, 17:48

Great story telling man, you executed it really well, also, Great vocab dude. Everything seemed to flow awesome!! keep it up!
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Re: Geno - Floor (Day 6)

Postby Slim Fiasco » Jun 24th, '12, 20:14

That was awesome. You may think that I'm not adding new ish to my feedback, but you constantly make me stress the quality of the rhyming and the vocabulary. It's the things I love the most in your pieces, and it's great that you don't lose sight of the content.
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Re: Geno - Floor (Day 6)

Postby Arabian Shady » Jun 24th, '12, 20:19

Although its not my choice for a topic lol I love the fact that you had a neat set of internal rhymes and that alternative pattern between bars. FLow remained consistent. I like the imagery too man. Crystal clear picture painted. haha Sweet verse.
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Re: Geno - Floor (Day 6)

Postby Emadyville » Jun 25th, '12, 03:19

The way this flowed and rhymed: woke and spoke in broken vocals
Was dope as fuck.

And the way this flowed: Oh was it somethin' I said? No it was somethin' you gestured
Was just perfect.

Overall dope as fuck, rhymes, vocab, flow, it was sick as fuck dude great job
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