A New Day

[Atone]

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(Verse)
Just to have fun i'mma spit a couple bars
bust it like guns and flip to hustle hard
haters gonna talk but i stay rushin yards
thru craters i walk no play i crush ya tards
go ahead and find somethin to pick on
in a sick song i slip bombs to hit strong
and rip on you hicks my shits Kong
I'm king you just a donkey
tryin to hate on a honkey
til i go bonkers
like Tyler in Yonkers
am i buggin ya? that i'm a juggalo hittin ya juggala?
to kill the thug in you, fuck you hoe's i stay bustin ya
like adrenalin rushin thru, Atone back on the map
attackin the whack i'm a mac on the track
slappin ya act's- go ahead with ya who-hay
with who's ill and who's gay
whatever music you play
from Kid Cudi to Lupe
i'm a fiasco and found a new way
to be an ass-hole, this is a new day

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

NIce piece man, this is actually one of the better pieces I have seen from you, the rhyming was by far the best Ive read from you really nice job, The only thing I would say ( is what people have told me quite a bit) is some of the lines in there are just to short, maybe if you combined two lines it would be even i dont know because I'm not really an expert on that stuff in the first place! anyway, nice job dude.

[Mr.DGAF]

Yeah, like Shady said, this rhyming was crazy. You definitely rhymed a lot better than I'm used to seeing. I've gotta be honest, I know a lot of people question your audio but you are a pretty good writer. I remember seeing your stuff in the CW tag team tournament and thinking that you did pretty good. Structure's a bit weird but that's not a problem if it flows, and it does. Good piece man.