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Kim Kardashian (Fiasco Day 7)

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Re: Kim Kardashian (Fiasco Day 7)

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Jun 24th, '12, 18:18

Nice piece dude especially for writing in 15 minutes, Lol its funny how you looked up the Kardashian stuff then wrote about it, nice job man. I didnt catch some of the name references just because I have no idea who they are. Also you kept the transitions between rhyme schemes pretty smooth man.
But any way, great job, keep it up!
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Re: Kim Kardashian (Fiasco Day 7)

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jun 24th, '12, 18:56

Hahaha, read the title and though "Sam. would love this". Good stuff man, really good references in there. The first line was on point, liked that. Every reference was really nice, and the rhyming didn't really falter. Flow was nice and easy to pick up. But I loved the references the most, that was cool.
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Re: Kim Kardashian (Fiasco Day 7)

Postby Slim Fiasco » Jun 24th, '12, 20:11

Hahah, that was dope man. Now I'll be honest, I didn't get a lot of the references but I love this on the strength of the tittle alone, lol. The rhyming was good and I didn't have problems with the flow. Great job and good to have you back on board. Oh and the last line was my favorite. It's some ass indeed.
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Re: Kim Kardashian (Fiasco Day 7)

Postby Tarabulus » Jun 25th, '12, 07:17

Nice drop, i like the flow, but the references were for experts in kim kardashian, i'm talking like Ph.D man!
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