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Here He Comes Again (Fiasco Day 8)

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Here He Comes Again (Fiasco Day 8)

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jun 25th, '12, 19:51

This should be funny to most here, it is an Eminem site haha. No beat again.

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Damnit, there he goes again jotting all the same shit
Can't we tell this older Slim to shop at other places?
Instead you know his day's spent in here, Ike will never go
Plus he brings that lame chick, shit it's like his seventh ho
Guess we'll never know, he's always screaming at this white girl
She's about to cry because of things he did with plyers
They're about to by some breyers, here he comes to pay
Ew what the fuck? Okay, you want to pay with tons of change?
Plus you got that mustard stain that's chilling on your filthy tee
Let me guess, you'll spit at me then take this bitch to Mickey D's?
Chika -- please, we get it man you're message is repetitive
And if you keep up we'll arrest you then you'll see the exit Slim
Yes we won't forget it Em, and we don't even like rapping
Take you're ass to White Castle, never say that I'm Back though
Sorry Mr. White Rapper, shit is closed so take off
And if you hadn't guessed or didn't know, I'm K-Mart


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Re: Here He Comes Again (Fiasco Day 8)

Postby Slim Fiasco » Jun 25th, '12, 20:00

Hahah, dope ass shit man. I love this, very fitting for the site. The technical side was all good as well, nice rhyming, flow, and vocabulary. Great execution of a great idea!
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Re: Here He Comes Again (Fiasco Day 8)

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Jun 26th, '12, 04:10

AHAHAHAHA very creative and original dude! props for thinking of this! you executed the concept great as well as the rhyming and flow! hahaha damn nice job!
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Re: Here He Comes Again (Fiasco Day 8)

Postby Tarabulus » Jun 26th, '12, 06:43

Everybody's thinking now : why didn't i think of this??? haha great man!
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Re: Here He Comes Again (Fiasco Day 8)

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jun 26th, '12, 19:34

Thanks guys! Appreciate the feed.
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