by _Hawk_ » Jun 26th, '12, 16:44
It flows quite well, but in all honesty I can't stand the opening line: 'you've never mentioned a better flow'. It sounds awkward; the vast majority of people don't mention flows, they listen to them. Indeed, when something get's a mention you're referring to it briefly, so in that one line you've inadvertently suggested your flow verges on forgettable.
"Oh, he'll give us what we need.
It may not be what we want."