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Geno - Easier (Fiasco Day 11)

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Re: Geno - Easier (Fiasco Day 11)

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jun 29th, '12, 04:12

Haha dude I kinda see some of my piece in this. I expected a more comedic route from most writers here, and since you and I are the only ones dropping I guess I thought it was gonna be you haha. But this is really nice man. Flowed perfectly, rhymes were nice. I liked the repetition of "easier" in the first three lines, kinda reminded me of If I Had.
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Re: Geno - Easier (Fiasco Day 11)

Postby Sam. » Jun 30th, '12, 01:22

You sure do have thoughts cleared out every time you write, I guess. No wonder you bring something different every time. This is really dope. Technically sound too.
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Re: Geno - Easier (Fiasco Day 11)

Postby Sam. » Jun 30th, '12, 21:24

By that I mean, you know exactly what to say in the verse and make sure it's not repeated in future or in the same verse. That's why there's something new in your verses.
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Re: Geno - Easier (Fiasco Day 11)

Postby Block » Jun 30th, '12, 22:25

Hmm. I don't remember you being this good, Geno, haha. I liked it man. It reminds me a lot of McMaybe's work from last year. Perhaps a bit of myself. The rhymes and rhyme schemes are some of the best I've ever read here, in all honesty. Good shit, bro.

Oh, can I get my 2 pieces unlocked please? lol. SAJN'S A DICK.
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Re: Geno - Easier (Fiasco Day 11)

Postby SajN » Jun 30th, '12, 23:42

Block wrote:Hmm. I don't remember you being this good, Geno, haha. I liked it man. It reminds me a lot of McMaybe's work from last year. Perhaps a bit of myself. The rhymes and rhyme schemes are some of the best I've ever read here, in all honesty. Good shit, bro.

Oh, can I get my 2 pieces unlocked please? lol. SAJN'S A DICK.

So I am a dick because you can't follow the rules? Lol, fuck off.
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Re: Geno - Easier (Fiasco Day 11)

Postby Emadyville » Jul 1st, '12, 05:08

The writing had an epic feel to it, like what you were saying was really something we all should hear, so great job on that. Overall I loved it, it was a mix of flows and rhymes in a way, it was serious but at the same time needed. Great piece man, def enjoyed it.
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