A Heart Of Gold (Untold Story)

[Atone]

(Chorus)
I been around the block, once or twice
i made the gambles, i rolled the dice
i fought the struggles, i lived my life
i made it thru the worst of times
the best of times, i stay on the grind
no matter what, cuz i got a story untold
of the life of a warrior with a heart of gold

(Verse)
I just wanna rap, i don't care about the labels
don't want the fame, don't care about the money on the table
i just love the game, i don't care about the haters
they don't know my pain - and i don't tell no fables
so many rappers the same- they all a bunch of gangsters
showin off their chains - puttin hip hop in danger
i just wanna tell my story, put it in a crazy flow
i fight for my glory, don't care about the radio
the street's know who's real, who's got that skill
i got no time to play i came to get ill
sick with it - i get wicked - i let that liquid spill
the ink from the pen drop down on the pad
all my feelings in the notebook, every thought i ever had
from the good to bad, i been thru the ugly lookin for the pretty
beautiful sunshine to take away the dark days in the city
nitty-gritty i been a bad boy and i don't mean i chilled with diddy
i mean i chased the trouble, hung with the wrong crowds
but turned it all around, hey mom i hope i made you proud
and i love you dad and i say this loud
i seen the front page of the times from 88
i know about what you did for me, superman without the cape
ridin the harley, pop's just take your bow
if it wasn;t for you i question if i would be here now

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[Eedee]

This was a solid verse. The rhymes weren't that jaw-dropping, but they were decent enough to get across what you were trying to say.

This isn't your best piece, I've read/heard better. I want to see you write a 16 doing nothing but rhyming your ass off. You can talk about whatever the hell you want, just flex your lyrical muscle (I know you have it in ya).

But anyway, looking forward to the next drop.

[Wreck]

This was really dope, loved the realness in the lines, the concept, & the message, you should really think about writing 2 more verses for this & making it a song. It would be a great rags to riches lead single type of song, like Juicy was for Biggy. Nice job.