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My Dream Girl

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My Dream Girl

Postby EvryOnesACrtc » Aug 30th, '12, 02:12

Just a fun few verses I put together.

(Chorus)
You'll always be my dreaaam girl
no matter how bad things seeem, girl

Come out the basement, you've lived in the dark
for far too long I feel like we're drifting apart
now begin lifting your arms and bend over like the bitch that you are!
While I'm sniffing your arse and getting a good whiff of your farts
ah, smells like blood--that's what I call a good gift from the heart

(Chorus)
You'll always be my dreaaam girl
no matter how bad things seeem, girl

Ooh, yeah, that hand job is a stroke of genius
I've always wanted to deep-throat latinas
you suffer from bulimia nervosa? Here, let me help, choke on my penis
yeah, throw up that keema samosa and later we'll go to the cleaners
We both in agreement..?
My token of appreciation's I'll buy you a pizza pie, tuts
Psych! Treat you right? Gimme a reason why I should
When I don't know what to do, I ask what Jesus Christ would
ignore the advice, and beat you within an inch of your life with a piece of plywood
I never had a peaceful childhood...


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Re: My Dream Girl

Postby Broken Beats » Aug 30th, '12, 05:00

lol poor girl i bet u she beats u with plywood too lol good shit
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Re: My Dream Girl

Postby EvryOnesACrtc » Aug 31st, '12, 01:31

InsaneTRex94 wrote:
EvryOnesACrtc wrote:you suffer from bulimia nervosa? Here, let me help, choke on my penis

Epic line is epic.

Dude seriously, I like this. Still think you should write to a beat, however I think that you did a better job with the flow on this one. And the verses are very very short, they end suddenly. But still, just make your verses longer, work on your flow a bit more...but otherwise, good job :y:


Thanks! Yeah, in the words of Em, this was just one long verse and I stuck some bullshit hook in between it lol and haha Broken Beats, this was not based on anything even remotely true in my life.
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Re: My Dream Girl

Postby Eedee » Sep 1st, '12, 08:45

Lmfao, the rhyme scheme in the first verse was really sick, I liked it. Flow/structure was off a little but whatever.

Interesting piece nonetheless.
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