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Re: bigray - bored

Postby Eedee » Oct 2nd, '12, 09:02

I almost got the flow for this, but just barely.

The rhymes were simple as fuck but the content was funny haha.

Interesting... definitely could improve though.
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Postby SoldierShady » Oct 2nd, '12, 12:19

Lame..
"So one last time, I'm back, 'fore it fades into black and it's all over, behold the final chapter in the saga, trying to recapture that lightning trapped in a bottle twice, the magic that started it all...tragic portrait of an artist tortured....trapped in his own drawings..." - Bruce.

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Postby EvryOnesACrtc » Oct 2nd, '12, 23:20

This. Was. Bad.

You can't be possibly be expecting any sort of good feedback for this. It looks like you put absolutely no thought into this.

I'm actually not sure on whether you're seriously this horrendous or if you're just attempting to troll us.
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Postby GreenHatOrangeBill » Jan 11th, '13, 04:28

Kind of funny, I like any mention of Kermit the Frog. Reminds me of SSLP era Eminem.

Not the best rap imo and flows a bit awkwardly, may becoz of too many syllabes f.e.

"Brige appeared terrified, I said “See this tooth pick?”
She replied “reminds of my tiny slippery dick” "
I'M DRUNK AGAIN LOL
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Re: bigray - bored

Postby GreenHatOrangeBill » Jan 18th, '13, 12:11

It's a compliment homie, yours interested me
I'M DRUNK AGAIN LOL
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