Painkiller & CanadaPure - When Push Comes To Shove

[CanadaPure]

Painkiller and I wanted to put together something a little bit more serious and complete after we just sort of goofed around on the last one. Comments and criticism welcome

LoF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=152397#p2085710
Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1IQvikMwkcA

[Painkiller]
Grew up a scrawny defenseless little boy
Got kicked around til he broke like a brittle toy
No one will ever listen to his distressed cries
He tried to avoid school by saying immense lies
Which only made shit worse, curse after curse
Hoping he'd fucking die! "Why me, oh why oh why?!"
He'd cry right at the sky...
Then it dawned to him, an unheard destiny
Crazed and fed up, vengeance to him? A necessity
But the poor kid went about the wrong way
Loaded up a clip, ahead of him a long day
As he approached his High School, all black everything
His target? No target, just aimed and shot at anything
Innocent bystanders gunned up for no reason
He did it with no remorse, that all please'd him
Now it's not bullies, but guilt that's diseased him

[Hook]
Why, can't I see the light,
I wait days just so I can see the night,
No one can explain why I don't feel right,
Ev-ery-bo-dy lies...

[CanadaPure]
He feels like he ain't fit for this earth anymore
No more hurt anymore, yeah it hurts when he's warned
That he's a freak of nature, a black sheep and hated
Now he's a beast of hatred, you didn't see what they did
Could of been suicidal and put the gun to his own temple
A rapper's his truest idol, reads his lyrics by the penful
And he's so mad he doesn't understand that words on a pad
Aren't real and it's worse when people hurt him so bad
So he grabs his dads ax and the whole carton of gas
His hearts fast and in a flash he sees his target at last
A few seconds later the smell of disembowelment sours
He lost track of time now it's minutes bowin' to hours
Already had cleaned up when the other kids dad walks in
Couldn't even scream fuck before he sets the ax on him
Now it's a problem he's got innocent blood on his hands
But he smiles cause he knows they cant touch him again

[Hook]
Why... can't I see the light,
I wait days just so I can see the night,
No one can explain why I don't feel right,
Ev-ery-bo-dy lies...
Why... can't I see the light,
I wait days just so I can see the night,
No one can explain why I don't feel right,
And Ev-ery-bo-dy dies...

[PAINKILLƎR]

Dope

[CanadaPure]

:flutter: Dope

I don't think you or my opinions are valid.

[PAINKILLƎR]

Dope

I don't think you or my opinions are valid.

They should be

[Blu]

I like it.

[PAINKILLƎR]

Thanks.

[Blu]

I'd like it even better if you guys chose a darker beat, as those are pretty dark topics you two are rapping about.

[CanadaPure]

I'd like it even better if you guys chose a darker beat, as those are pretty dark topics you two are rapping about.

It you think about someone starting out in desperation as they're rapping it though, and then it progressively gets darker. The beat works, but if I was in control of sound production it would start out simple and sad but gradually build a darker sound as the rap get darks.

Thanks for the feed Blu.

[PAINKILLƎR]

I think the beat is good for it overall for the song, though I've would've liked it a bit darker though

Thanks for the feed Blu.

[CanadaPure]

I think the beat is good for it overall for the song, though I've would've liked it a bit darker though

Thanks for the feed Blu.

I agree. I liked the feel of the beat, but it being darker would have worked better.

[PAINKILLƎR]

I'd like it even better if you guys chose a darker beat, as those are pretty dark topics you two are rapping about.

Definitely, I don't think the beat fit the concept at all.

I think this is cool, both of you are pretty good, the storytelling here was great. Better than what I was capable of when I was starting out. What bugs me is you guys somewhat have a similar story to what I was writing about. There's no real criticism I can think of, it's a good drop

You just jealy bruh, nah I partially agree. Thanks for the feed

[CanadaPure]

I'd like it even better if you guys chose a darker beat, as those are pretty dark topics you two are rapping about.

Definitely, I don't think the beat fit the concept at all.

I think this is cool, both of you are pretty good, the storytelling here was great. Better than what I was capable of when I was starting out. What bugs me is you guys somewhat have a similar story to what I was writing about. There's no real criticism I can think of, it's a good drop

That's probably because I changed concepts partway through and didn't want to change my flow so I didn't bother looking for a similar BPM beat.

Where's the embarrassed smilies? lol

[PAINKILLƎR]

You think the "Stan" beat would've worked out better?

[Eedee]

This was pretty cool. I liked the story-telling and the rhyming from both was a step up from the last piece.

Both of you did well and really shined light on the "inside" of the recent shootings. This was cool, nice job.

[EmTV]

Didn't check what the beat was, but when I was reading it I had the rhythm of a darker version of the Mr. Pillow Man song by Hop.

This made my boner touch my titties though