CanadaPure - Hip Hop

[CanadaPure]

So I totally said I was done for a bit, I lied because this idea for a concept verse came to me while listening to Xzibits Napalm CD. Even though it is just writing to write, I'll think you'll see the concept pretty fast!

LoF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=152753#p2087169
Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IkRIpWLQmXY


A bunch of Outsidaz spitting with Immortal Techinque
Hungry Rough Ridaz, yeah your informal shit's weak
Welcome to the Slaughterhouse hussy, I got shifty men
To carry manslaughter out for roughly 50 Cents
Either quit or get with it cause I'm the real Xzibit
Not a side show, let the people say whos Swift and who isn't
If you happen to C-Murder, that makes you the sole witness
And if you cant show Proof you'll probably go with it
I'm Twiztid and diabolical like I got two brains
I got Two Chainz to hang you with, watch what you say
When you Bust a Rhyme I say don't ever trust the line
I'm shooting like Tech N9ne's and still feel rushed for time
This isn't a warzone but I'm still hearing Drumma Boys
I hate the tone in the Game saying that guns are toys
Y'all just wanna be like The Criminalz, throwing subliminals
Which is Bizarre considering it's all just fictitional

[PAINKILLƎR]

you already know how I feel about this, Incredible work my *****

[CanadaPure]

:worship: you already know how I feel about this, Incredible work my *****

People are gonna get sick of the CP and Pain circlejerk we got going doe.

[PAINKILLƎR]

you already know how I feel about this, Incredible work my *****

People are gonna get sick of the CP and Pain circlejerk we got going doe.

I'm of fan of your work so, Idgaf.

[CanadaPure]

This was really nice....beat was sick. I could flow easy on this....didnt see too much rhyming not that it is a bad thing.

Overall I really enjoyed this verse.

The rhyming got sacrificed a bit for trying to reference a different rapper/rap group in every line, it made it really difficult tbh.

Thanks for the feed Bigray, I wont cry anymore 'cause my fellow Canadian repped me,

[PAINKILLƎR]

smh @ how slept on my ***** CP is.

[CanadaPure]

smh @ how slept on my ***** CP is.

I like being slept on... by cute bitches

Overall this isn't my best though, the rhyming isn't strong.

[Blu]

Dope concept. Nicely executed. Good job.

[CanadaPure]

Dope concept. Nicely executed. Good job.

Thanks Blu,

[Eedee]

That was dope. I don't agree with bigray - you had some nice multis throughout.

[CanadaPure]

That was dope. I don't agree with bigray - you had some nice multis throughout.

I'm going to make passionate love to you while we lick tarter sauce off Jennifer Aniston's nipples.

[Mr.DGAF]

This was cool, nice spin on the names and all. I thought it was gonna be a typical "yo dawgz raps is soft now!!1!" but it was a different take on it. The rhymes were there, I noticed a couple nice end multis, but you could benefit from a few more internal rhymes. I saw a few here and there but that would be a thing to work on improving in the future. The C-Murder/Proof line was my favorite, clever set up there.

[CanadaPure]

This was cool, nice spin on the names and all. I thought it was gonna be a typical "yo dawgz raps is soft now!!1!" but it was a different take on it. The rhymes were there, I noticed a couple nice end multis, but you could benefit from a few more internal rhymes. I saw a few here and there but that would be a thing to work on improving in the future. The C-Murder/Proof line was my favorite, clever set up there.

Haha, I don't think I'll ever write a verse like that, it just isn't me. Thanks for the feedback Mr.DGAF, I'll take that into consideration with my future verses for sure.