Concession

[SliK]

Concession.

My Memories are enemies there's no denying that
It ain't new shit to romanticize the past
Take two hits and turn my eyes to glass
my mind's relaxed, I might sleep tonight at last
Wake up feeling even worse so I find my stash
It's a vicious cycle, turn a blind eye to that...
I try to laugh, because it's pretty funny
Got a list of honeys who despise my ass
Too much time has passed and this load on me
Won't recede so I blow more trees...
A slow retreat into a much more peaceful place
If I judge it right, I'll forget them for at least a day
Doesn't sound like much to you but for me it's great
Haven't been a saint, never seen a reason
Having said that I've never been a demon
But I battle plenty and my weed defeats 'em

Opinions welcome.
LOF

[CanadaPure]

Take two hits and turn my eyes to glass

That was my favorite line. The whole thing was really mellow and fit the whole weed subject matter, so I thought it was well executed. Very nice.

[Eedee]

Seeing as I don't smoke weed, I can't really relate to this, but I can appreciate the rhyming and talent here.

[CanadaPure]

I liked this a lot....it did feel very mellow as I read it. ...only thing imo is to describe the weed a bit more, cuz it could be any drug ur talking about. Unless u r trying to make the reader guess...

Again I wish there was a beat.

smh bigray

But I battle plenty and my weed defeats 'em

[Sam.]

Work on your flow man. It wasn't consistent enough. Content, Rhyming, were decent enough. Keep practicing.

[Kill You]

Take two hits and turn my eyes to glass

That was my favorite line. The whole thing was really mellow and fit the whole weed subject matter, so I thought it was well executed. Very nice.

Agree with this, that was dope as fuck.

Whole thing was dope.

[Hopsinshadie]

This one was good, but some of the lines were superfluous/fillers and didn't quite rhyme. But take off those few lines and this is a competent rap.

[SliK]

There isn't any filler tbh, everything I said was said for a reason.
Would you mind pointing out some of the lines you felt didn't rhyme?

Thanks to everyone who left feedback.

[Just Silver]

Honestly didnt see much problems with flow like others stated except maybe the "judge it " line near the end

i can relate to this so i enjoyed it ,pretty good a lil short but that was intended

and yea i dont see "filler" either just cause it doesnt rhyme doesnt mean filler

good piece