Quick Verse

[CrashBand]

Link Of Feed

Just been doing the cyphers a wee bit as of recent to try and get back in the groove. So wrote a a quick half verse.


I’m a really decent member........with an appallingly bad attitude
Gaining popularity...that’s why they’re calling me Crash Bandicoot
So I teamed up with SliK.... tried to form a little battle group
Didn’t realise it was concepts.. so we quickly waved our flag of truce
and scrapped our shitty version of “James and the Giant Passionfruit”
Started getting sympathy – shit, I thought it was a bad excuse
I suppose we’re pretty lucky... as we didn't really have a clue
SliK’s mum, not so much.... she can only now drink apple juice
….and cans of soup


Might seem a bit obscure, but me and SliK pulled out of the Creative Writing Tournament because his mum was in a car accident.

[Just Silver]

it was decent shoulda been at least a little longer but yea i knew about the incident

[Mr.DGAF]

I definitely appreciate keepin the scheme the whole time, none of it felt forced. There's a bit of wit which is typical with your style of writing. Good to see you posting verses again, you're definitely a good writer. No real critiques cause it's a short little piece. Seems like the tourney has brought some writers back again.

[xarius]

I think you need to truncate your sentences in a way it keeps the same meaning but requires less words.

[Sam.]

Reminded me of 'Throw It Up'. I mean the flow lol. I really like these kind of verses, cleans, sharp and dope.

[Eedee]

You have the weirdest structure, Crash haha

But as DGAF said, you have this dry wit in your writing which I can appreciate. Rhyme schemes and flow was good too. Good little verse, brah.

[CrashBand]

Yeah, I've only been writing acapella recently, which is why.