bigray - LIFE

[Just Silver]

good shit overall style and everythin

actually thought the chorus was decent which is hard to do imo

[CanadaPure]

I get what or saying but I don't see how sellin crack and hella mad ryhme.

It's a near-rhyme because they both have the strong-A sound.

[Just Silver]

this analysis is interesting

[Just Silver]

this analysis is interesting

Why

you love to tell me "why" lol well anyway i meant your feed was helpful and in depth which sorta can be rare

[Emadyville]

Ok I'm gunna keep it simple. Do everything Geno said. Well work on it I should say. Here, you want to learn about end rhymes, I found this verse yesterday I wrote in college about 4-5 years ago.

Let me break it down yeah for the audience,
I’m not sorry, I have not brought amends,
I said what I had to, I hopped the fence,
Into some other world like I lost my sense,
And I went off on some so I brought intense,
Rhymes to destroy those that I fought against,
And right now, I couldn't give two shits,
I lifted some skirts and exposed whose bitch,
And I’m fine with that, I can sleep tonight,
My mind is back yeah, I will keep it right,
Even though some thoughts might creep at night,
I’m done with that shit I’m like peace goodnight,
I had a couple drinks and yeah I’m twenty one,
Say shit I’ll destroy you like this dummies done,
Go ahead and make jokes but it’s funny none,
Words are my weapon and it’s been a lovely run,
I had on this rap shit destroying egos,
My minds ten times yours so when we go,
On a rampage with a pen and some damn rage,
It’s slaughter to the pad now it’s a damp page,
But that’s enough of that, it’s not war now,
To be truthful my entire life is worn down,
An entire a week of no sleep has me restless,
Has me wondering if, I can ever best-this,
And makes every sentence become sexist,
I guess it’s all them, it is just infectious,
Transferred from one bitch to the next-bitch,
They’re out for hearts and they all left-rich,
I guess it’s my fault I shoulda never said-shit,
But I can’t lie, be false and pretended,
Goddamn why must it always come back to that,
I guess it’s just my life through the facts I rap,
But on the real to the people with fan support,
The new Catty Crew, the page is the damn court,
And to all those who show love and gave props,
You kept me here, and for that I haven’t stopped,
I’m just glad I’m able to spit this laid back,
No more beef for now and no more pay back,
I said enough shit to get off this chest,
I can give it a rest, I can live it I’m blessed,
For those who give feedback I am thankful,
And for those who don’t I won’t be tranquil,
You have me ready to show this mad skill,
Make some heads ache and not ten Advil,
Will help you in that case no way no how,
You made me this way I cannot slow down,
I’ll keep rapping circles in this rhyme hoedown,
From here to Cali and back to Motown,
For bigmouths, dickheads, and every hoe now,
Who crosses my path, I’m here to hold the crown,
Sit in that chair that won’t fold I’ll lounge,
Write between the lines and go out of bounds,
On anything, everyday as I go my rounds,
If you show you doubt then I know no outs,
And I’m shining right now yeah I know no clouds,
And I don’t have to speak the rhymes so so loud,
But my Jermaine Dupri fans man are so so deaf,
I speak what I write and they’re like no no left,
And even that went over your heads I bet,
Call me a beast or someone put me to rest,
Because I am a beast, yeah whenever I rhyme just,
If you want to grade me I could see an A minus,
Cause to grade me an A’s far above the rest,
But minus A from a beast, makes me the best,
So maybe it’s true I’m hip-hops royal savior,
Because I'm the shit, where’s the toilet paper,
Damn, wish my ego had left-me calmer,
But I murder tracks I am raps Jeffrey Dalhmer,
I send bombs when I work I am Ted Kaczynski,
And I rebounded the game call me Ed Lapinski,
My train of thoughts may have engineered rap,
Cause I put that train right back on its track,
Even with the mind state of someone in a coma,
I’m Kanye, I graduated, where’s my diploma,
I’ve done all I can I’ll wait on the title now,
As I approach the end I’ll take my final bow,
So this is the mixtape, go ahead use it kids,
Remember this is life so let the music live…

[Just Silver]

Ok I'm gunna keep it simple. Do everything Geno said. Well work on it I should say. Here, you want to learn about end rhymes, I found this verse yesterday I wrote in college about 4-5 years ago.

Let me break it down yeah for the audience,
I’m not sorry, I have not brought amends,
I said what I had to, I hopped the fence,
Into some other world like I lost my sense,
And I went off on some so I brought intense,
Rhymes to destroy those that I fought against,
And right now, I couldn't give two shits,
I lifted some skirts and exposed whose bitch,
And I’m fine with that, I can sleep tonight,
My mind is back yeah, I will keep it right,
Even though some thoughts might creep at night,
I’m done with that shit I’m like peace goodnight,
I had a couple drinks and yeah I’m twenty one,
Say shit I’ll destroy you like this dummies done,
Go ahead and make jokes but it’s funny none,
Words are my weapon and it’s been a lovely run,
I had on this rap shit destroying egos,
My minds ten times yours so when we go,
On a rampage with a pen and some damn rage,
It’s slaughter to the pad now it’s a damp page,
But that’s enough of that, it’s not war now,
To be truthful my entire life is worn down,
An entire a week of no sleep has me restless,
Has me wondering if, I can ever best-this,
And makes every sentence become sexist,
I guess it’s all them, it is just infectious,
Transferred from one bitch to the next-bitch,
They’re out for hearts and they all left-rich,
I guess it’s my fault I shoulda never said-shit,
But I can’t lie, be false and pretended,
Goddamn why must it always come back to that,
I guess it’s just my life through the facts I rap,
But on the real to the people with fan support,
The new Catty Crew, the page is the damn court,
And to all those who show love and gave props,
You kept me here, and for that I haven’t stopped,
I’m just glad I’m able to spit this laid back,
No more beef for now and no more pay back,
I said enough shit to get off this chest,
I can give it a rest, I can live it I’m blessed,
For those who give feedback I am thankful,
And for those who don’t I won’t be tranquil,
You have me ready to show this mad skill,
Make some heads ache and not ten Advil,
Will help you in that case no way no how,
You made me this way I cannot slow down,
I’ll keep rapping circles in this rhyme hoedown,
From here to Cali and back to Motown,
For bigmouths, dickheads, and every hoe now,
Who crosses my path, I’m here to hold the crown,
Sit in that chair that won’t fold I’ll lounge,
Write between the lines and go out of bounds,
On anything, everyday as I go my rounds,
If you show you doubt then I know no outs,
And I’m shining right now yeah I know no clouds,
And I don’t have to speak the rhymes so so loud,
But my Jermaine Dupri fans man are so so deaf,
I speak what I write and they’re like no no left,
And even that went over your heads I bet,
Call me a beast or someone put me to rest,
Because I am a beast, yeah whenever I rhyme just,
If you want to grade me I could see an A minus,
Cause to grade me an A’s far above the rest,
But minus A from a beast, makes me the best,
So maybe it’s true I’m hip-hops royal savior,
Because I'm the shit, where’s the toilet paper,
Damn, wish my ego had left-me calmer,
But I murder tracks I am raps Jeffrey Dalhmer,
I send bombs when I work I am Ted Kaczynski,
And I rebounded the game call me Ed Lapinski,
My train of thoughts may have engineered rap,
Cause I put that train right back on its track,
Even with the mind state of someone in a coma,
I’m Kanye, I graduated, where’s my diploma,
I’ve done all I can I’ll wait on the title now,
As I approach the end I’ll take my final bow,
So this is the mixtape, go ahead use it kids,
Remember this is life so let the music live…

hell ya guy sick

[Emadyville]

Wow! Thanks so much Emady

That was pretty sick and will for sure help me a ton...I hope you don't mind that I save this verse on my own computer...it will help me big time.

Edit: That is just amazing...read it like 3 times already

no thats fine, i hope it does.

was fucking weird when I found it yesterday cause I vaguely remembered writing it.