bigray - End Rhymes

[Just Silver]

huge improvement liked it alot keep up the end rhymes but dont be afraid to switch flowz

[SliK]

I hope I got it write this time.

[SliK]

I think this piece flows better than all your other pieces because you have structured your rhymes a lot better than in any of your other pieces I have read. End rhymes are all spot on, they are basic rhymes but considering this is a practice verse that makes sense. Content was your usual style which again is expected in a practice verse but it would be cool to see you switch that up a bit.

Does that mean a fail? Or my spelling lol...right?

I just found it funny that you used the wrong "right".

[Emadyville]

Def a lot better, not close to a dope verse, but it takes time. The content was meh, I mean it sounds like rappers these days, stand out, dont sound like them. Be you. The end rhymes were better but just work on it, keep making it better. thats what makes a sick lyricist, someone who works the hardest