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Soma

Postby Just Silver » Feb 20th, '13, 00:13

Feed- * Canadapure-scat

Took some relaxants as i rap in past tense
I develop an accent and cant think for my actions
Guess shit happens like diapers and birds
Your hype was absurd killem with a cypher from church
That holy water flow make only daughters know
I slaughter hoes back of the black shack leave shards of clothes
Packing action lets get it crackin like cartilage bones
My ass composed myself i am my own
When i spit it its probably from overdose
Im way over foes theyre 30,000 below sink with the boats
I think im a host to these games theyre so lame leg casts
Get back before the tech will kill a brainiac
Maniac killin forum nerds i need more than church
This was sorta rehearsed got hashed in a verse
Stash in her purse , was mine from birth
Double the "9"s who am i gonna serve
"Mark" my words like the bible said
It may say just silver but my title is red
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Re: Soma

Postby Mr.DGAF » Feb 20th, '13, 00:27

Best drop I've read from you in terms of writing. Lots of overlapping schemes and all, very intricately written.
You'd be surprised...
How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: Soma

Postby Just Silver » Feb 20th, '13, 00:29

Mr.DGAF wrote:Best drop I've read from you in terms of writing. Lots of overlapping schemes and all, very intricately written.

that means alot thanks guy :b:
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Re: Soma

Postby Just Silver » Feb 21st, '13, 00:56

bumpin firstn last
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Re: Soma

Postby Strictt Ame » Feb 21st, '13, 21:32

Nice multis and the flow was on point..some lines seemed a bit forced to fit the rhyme scheme but overall it was a good read..keep it up
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Re: Soma

Postby Just Silver » Feb 21st, '13, 22:49

Menzo wrote:Shit, the writing here was awesome. Like DGAF said, a lot of intertwined rhyme schemes and the flow was really fun to bounce to.

Really good man, you've already got the concept of multies, flow and coherency down. I'd like to see what you can do more conceptually, and what you've got in store with Spyder.

thanks guy i got lots more for the future :y:
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Postby Just Silver » Feb 21st, '13, 22:52

Strictt Ame wrote:Nice multis and the flow was on point..some lines seemed a bit forced to fit the rhyme scheme but overall it was a good read..keep it up

thanks broski havent seen u around in the longest time :o
but ya not my best but overall an improvement :y:
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