Feelin' Down

[Koolo2010]

Our day will come and that's a fact
but i know you feel the same way so won't regret
let me show you the best from me, it's early in the morning and without i can't sleep
i keep dreaming, picturing your face,your beautiful smile is an amazing grace
baby, stay by my side just one more time, i promess
there won't be no more lies,no more fights
just me and you in a low light room, making love feeling the chemistry
girl without you i feel so empty
it's crazy how my body need you, it's sad that i can't call you my boo
my mind is blowing up right now, because i'm feeling sick i'm feeling down
you are my power my energy, you are my everything
you are more than my brain could think
so just think about this... Motherfucker

[Mr.DGAF]

You need to give somebody in the section feedback man.

[Just Silver]

its eh rhymes need work and flow was ok

need to give feed back

really too short to give detailed feed try to make clearer structure to help flow

overall good for a beginner

[Sam.]

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Feed any of the verse and use the link to that post as your Link of feed.

Sorry, SajN, for posting this. I know it's the Mods job, but ..