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Neurontin

Postby Just Silver » Mar 1st, '13, 03:59

Feed- Bigray Quick 16 plz*copy n paste :sweating:


Drugs are illegal so my bodys a prison
Shit is blurring my vision now im preferring my writtens
Never knew what to know my lifes reciprocal
Backwards ass shit like wives at a stripping pole
Knives near my throat hole adams apple fallin out
On the couch suicidal thoughts are a roundabout
Surrounded by a large amount of stress and charged accounts
Debit and credit forget it its endless from bills to the friendships
Its all a hill to we end it, such a steep slope till the end of the sentence
Periods of life , kilos recommended just to get to the ending
Smoke up and dose up none of it is offending
It feels as if most spoke with pretending i show
Those i know who cope with dope in a row
Of days in dazes eye got glazed shit every time daily basis
Face this ,its real now drugs by the pound
Like dogs but dog im still feelin my mind in a fog
Should i take my life and wait for applause
Who coulda caused my strengths and my flaws
It aint God, and it aint right i write too much
No one seems to like the stuff,but im nice as fuck
Like pornstar fuckin good spiderman of neighborhood
Twice the man,look at you,pity spit is beautiful
Flip the script lunatic im gettin with newer shit
Upside down they say try to write now
Consuming it, i write down cypher from clouds
Smoked and proud theyll know me now
Ill show you how to setup and step up
Ahead like a headbutt your dead guts roadkill
Hold up dont chill get aggressive and progressive Flo
Yes or no agree with weed to the decimal
Gram weight a man baked liked damn cake
Frosting is from Boston top of my mind i get lost in
Stopping the ride before i get nauseous
Popping pills till im car sick and all departed
Arsonist of artistic spit part man part Bic
Flame tip, Name is ,A partially deranged kid
Outrageous out parks and the playlist
Startin up my spaceship im out... Amen
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Re: Neurontin

Postby Just Silver » Mar 2nd, '13, 04:02

Bump is anyone here :confusion: :'(
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Re: Neurontin

Postby Just Silver » Mar 4th, '13, 17:36

last bump then i might write in a bit
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Postby Sam. » Mar 4th, '13, 17:51

It looks like you wrote this to shake off your "Writers Block" or some shit, because there's struggle written all over the verse. It was really not that impressive. I had to read some of the bars more than once just to understand what you were trying to say. Rhyming was weak and hurtful, you're better than this, dude. Flow, well, I'd rather not say anything because it was passable. Don't get mad, it had it's highs.
[Rollefsen] - SajN retired, bitch got old, unlike Sams "ladies".
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Re: Neurontin

Postby Just Silver » Mar 4th, '13, 18:03

Sam. wrote:It looks like you wrote this to shake off your "Writers Block" or some shit, because there's struggle written all over the verse. It was really not that impressive. I had to read some of the bars more than once just to understand what you were trying to say. Rhyming was weak and hurtful, you're better than this, dude. Flow, well, I'd rather not say anything because it was passable. Don't get mad, it had it's highs.

lol this was a part of my drug induced series of writtens obviously Neurontin effects my writing in a bad way and Somas help i find

And ya thanks for constructively feeding :y:

u should check out if my drunk raps are better lol
"Four Loko"

on "No Gravity" just weed
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Re: Neurontin

Postby Sam. » Mar 4th, '13, 18:35

I'm going to feed more of the drops in this section soon. I'll be dropping some stuff soon, be on a look out.
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Postby Just Silver » Mar 4th, '13, 18:38

ok guy good looking out
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