bigray - Lean Beef

[Just Silver]

I had a weird flow with this but rhymes were hit or miss

i really liked the concept itd be nice for a pt.2 of the beef type verse

[Slim Fiasco]

Good lookin' out man, but the lines look kinda long. Of course, if you can flow them with no problems then that's what matters. My suggestion to every writer in here is to write their lyrics to a beat, because at the end of the day that's the goal of rap music - to have a product in sonic form. When you write to a beat, the length of the bars will come naturally, and it's also better so that you practice your flow.

And don't forget to do as much as freestyling as you can.

[Sam.]

Your problem is that you've lot of stuff to say and don't know how to put them out in a proper verse. That's happens a lot of times when you're new to this stuff. It happened to me a lot when I started out; still happens at times. I just jot 'em down and then re-write the whole thing. What I did was, I practiced poetry. I used to do it a freaking lot. What that does is:

1. It helps you put your thoughts properly in bars without elongating the whole thing;
2. It seems dope and pleasant to read;
3. There's less no of words crammed in your bars;
4. It makes your thought process wider and helps you cover more topics; and
5. You can say the same things in 'n' no of different ways.