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Re: Bigray - Warning

Postby Blu » Mar 30th, '13, 03:36

You've improved your end rhymes, good job. The only lines words that don't rhyme are "prayer" and "air," unless you said "air" as "AY-er." But still, good job.

Wasn't really feeling the beat choice but hey, you're only trying to get better. Good job bro.
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Re: Bigray - Warning

Postby Blu » Mar 30th, '13, 03:49

Depends how you say "prayer." If you have an accent, or if you're saying it quick enough, it'd come out as "Prair." But, I pronounce "prayer" as "PRAY-er," so it's two syllables for me.
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Re: Bigray - Warning

Postby Spyder » Mar 30th, '13, 03:57

end rhymes, finally rhyme

and prayer, and air. are examples of an acceptable slant rhyme

i say prayer, as one syllable all the time. as do songs and such.
i actually find it odd to say it as two syllable...

now u just need multies
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Re: Bigray - Warning

Postby Spyder » Mar 30th, '13, 05:18

if theyre multi syllables rhymes going on

it doesnt matter where its placed, but u know what a multi is.
its considered novice to only rhyme one syllable
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Re: Bigray - Warning

Postby J.R. » Apr 3rd, '13, 20:47

Holy fuck this went hard. No crit. you improved a bunch.
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Re: Bigray - Warning

Postby Eedee » Apr 4th, '13, 01:21

Wait, so you wrote this about me? I couldn't tell.
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Re: Bigray - Warning

Postby CanadaPure » Apr 4th, '13, 03:37

That Eedee/bigray beefosaurus is sexy.
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Re: Bigray - Warning

Postby Spyder » Apr 4th, '13, 03:38

CanadaPure wrote:That Eedee/bigray beefosaurus is sexy.


can chocolate rain come from vanilla sky :o
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Re: Bigray - Warning

Postby CanadaPure » Apr 4th, '13, 03:40

Spyder wrote:
CanadaPure wrote:That Eedee/bigray beefosaurus is sexy.


can chocolate rain come from vanilla sky :o


http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index ... 815AA3yyNp

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Re: Bigray - Warning

Postby Spyder » Apr 4th, '13, 03:44

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Re: Bigray - Warning

Postby Eedee » Apr 4th, '13, 06:24

CanadaPure wrote:That Eedee/bigray beefosaurus is sexy.


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Re: Bigray - Warning

Postby Just Silver » Apr 6th, '13, 14:13

good improving air def rhymes with prayer i gotta get writing ive been hiatus making beats

a little short but nice
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Re: Bigray - Warning

Postby Just Silver » Apr 6th, '13, 19:39

lol yea im back just makin sure writers block doesnt stick this time
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Re: Bigray - Warning

Postby CanadaPure » Apr 6th, '13, 20:38

Menzo wrote:
Blu wrote:You've improved your end rhymes, good job. The only lines words that don't rhyme are "prayer" and "air," unless you said "air" as "AY-er." But still, good job.

Wasn't really feeling the beat choice but hey, you're only trying to get better. Good job bro.


Prayer and air rhyme perfectly from where Ray's from, people don't say "prayer" as "pray-er" that much, it's more like "prair".

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Just saw others said the same thing.


I also say prair. So it works for me.
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Re: Bigray - Warning

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Apr 6th, '13, 20:40

I say Prair, but in my head I go Pray-er, so it really depends on what you're aiming for. But Prayer works.
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