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Freestyle

Postby Kez » Jul 5th, '06, 18:47

This is something i freestyled not long ago that i just wanted to share.
If possible, keep the flaming limited?

I'm gonna smash you and attack you and trap you deliberately
Your style is wack, and lacks delivery
You cannot step to me or give to me
Any skill, or any problems, the problem is you can't live it, see
Your rap style is limiting
Your stuff lacks feeling
My stuff ain't crap, demeaning
I'm like an apple unpeeling
Sometimes i feel like keeling
On the ground so i don't have to feel this feeling
Your shit is crap and i'm reeling
If you hate me you can just pull a wheelie
Into the sea, and die, then hit the ceiling!


Being freestyle the rhymes aint as complex.

I just thought i would share.
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Postby katastrophe » Jul 5th, '06, 21:40

it was pretty good. i liked the metaphores.
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Jul 5th, '06, 21:47

memyselforwho wrote:why flame, its real good :8)


i agree
was good especially for a freestyle
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I still rap better than you.

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Postby autotooner » Jul 6th, '06, 01:03

nice work.
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