Geno & CP - Knowing You

[CanadaPure]

That was a lot of fun to do Geno, I had a blast playing with a different flow for once <3

[Snakebeast]

The verses were

Geno:

All you say is "don't make me laugh", grazin' my face with a hasty slap,
I don't gotta waste these raps and be angry, mad at these ladies' crap,
...And baby the weight you add is insane, I can't take it, it makes me drag,
...So save me the "changing" act, cuz I'm really gone now and I ain't need that,
Girl...I've had it with us, you're gonna end up in the back of the truck,
With a mask and some cuffs in a fashion I love, that passionate lust, lemme shackle you up

That whole part is fucking awesome. It's, as BlueberryMuffin would call it, "Flames".

CP:

She loved to take that pill, problems with her parents lead to addiction,
Doctors said we can fix 'em, next minute she's staring dead at prescriptions,
So affixed on her fix and I was there from the first time I had kissed you,
To the first time your dad hit you... Goodbye, I will miss you.

Those last four bars were full of rhymes but felt completely natural and not forced at all. Shit is hype as fuck.

Only things I dislike about this is the hook and the title.

But it's okay 'cause I'm here trying to pick up the pieces,
Everyone said I was looking for a reason to leave and,
I guess it's true, I guess it's you, don't know what you're going through,
But what we had's, in the past, and I feel sick just knowing you

I feel like the hook could've been a bit darker and angry to fit the whole "fuck that shit, I'm going to PUNCH YOUR FACE". I also feel like you missed an opportunity to change the hook slightly with each verse i.e. get darker and darker.

And the title just seems a bit generic for a song like this ._.

[CanadaPure]

And the title just seems a bit generic for a song like this ._.

Fuckin' Geno.

Although, the hook was me, so we're even

[CanadaPure]

I only named it that cuz you wrote it in the hook.

So it's all on you

Don't drop this on me fakkit

[CanadaPure]

I'm a faggot

[Francesco]

Business as usual.

[Atone]

Good beat choice, Sinima is my favorite soundclick producer

Canadapure, did you mean to put "foot in that" twice? it confused me a bit and your verse just didn't seem to go all that well

but geno, impressive, as always, great verse from you, alot of emotion, mixed with multi's, this was good

[CanadaPure]

Good beat choice, Sinima is my favorite soundclick producer

Canadapure, did you mean to put "foot in that" twice? it confused me a bit and your verse just didn't seem to go all that well

but geno, impressive, as always, great verse from you, alot of emotion, mixed with multi's, this was good

Yeah I did the flow to that beginning part is hard to explain.

[Sam.]

This was an impressive piece to read, both of you. Geno shines with his impressive content and it's presentation; while CP was also impressive with his presentation. Not so impressed with the actual content though, CP; it wasn't bad either. Both of you kicked ass in the Rhyming Dept, fantastic job. CP, I liked the flow that you experimented in this. I tried breaking the whole verse in a group of words, and taking a slight break after that, like: 1-2-Snap, 1-2-3-Snap. I truly enjoyed that way I flowed to this personally, not sure if you understood the thing that I just said about your flow, but nevermind. It's important that the reader enjoyed it fully. Keep at it.

[CanadaPure]

It's kinda shit that you guys aren't impressed with the content in mine when it was pretty well based around something that had actually happened to me. I dated a girl for a while who I found out was abused at home and she ended up with a pretty bad drug problem near that end of the relationship.

Either way, I respect the feedback. Thanks guys.

I understand what you mean about the flow Sam., that's exactly what I was going for and I'm glad you caught it

[CanadaPure]

Only 2 people said that CP...still got to give a little feedback sometime later today.

Yeah I know, just thought I should clarify that I'm not just BSing that though, know what I mean?

[CanadaPure]

I understood the content son, don't worry. It was very good.

I wasn't talking about you, faggot

[Sam.]

Your content was good. It was about a situation that I can imagine and write myself. I'm not taking credit from you with that comment about it being not that impressive. You can say it wasn't new to me as a reader. Seeing the relation of the verse to your life makes me wanna rate it near Geno's verse.

[CanadaPure]

Suck my dick

Strong start

I just didn't get how the flow worked at all, I picked it up on Geno's verse and started again. This was really well woven, both of you kept me interested in a theme I don't really care much for. I think your lyrics, and the way they're designed to flow really brought out the best in the beat. I think anything at a slower pace wouldn't have had that same effect

Well done, guys!

I know, that's the one thing I really dislike about doing some text only stuff. If you flow is weird or whatever on a particular section or piece, it doesn't translate well into text at all.

Thanks Hesky!

[Snakebeast]

TBH I read Geno's stuff in a Yelawolf-esque flow and it worked pretty fucking awesomely.