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[#4] Catastrophic - "Crazy About You" (Text + Audio) (TR2)

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[#4] Catastrophic - "Crazy About You" (Text + Audio) (TR2)

Postby Eedee » Jun 15th, '13, 11:34

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I guess you feed the text on this thread, feed the actual audio portion of the song on the AS thread. :y:

It all smells fishy, because now you're engaged,
There's no flowers, it rained, watch me flounder in pain.
I'm just a bastard who don't know how to control this,
My evil side enjoys it; feelin' down is a bonus.
Now that the onus has shifted, no one has gifted
Me anything in my life, I had to work for this sickness.
But what's worse is the shit that I dealt with
Made me numb to all this bullshit, until I smelled shit.
Now bury me in fertilizer,
I heard you're wiser to the world, but you're the girl I'm sure to like a-
Little bit here and there, what? No you're my fucking love
Miles away with a ring on your finger isn't where I'm coming from.
I explode with emotion, I'm "Wac-o", I flip shit
I throw the whole ocean to the land to find the ring that you slid in.
Then I see you in the distance, I miss this,
Baby, just how do I tell you that I'm


Crazy is perfect because I'm going insane
You're my Louis lane, tried to take the high-way but noticed that the road has changed
Now I'm floating my way, hoping that it goes away
Feeling so alone today and plus the growing migraine
Hemorrhages, this distance isn't quite what I imagined
But I'm finicky, and picky too so i might abandoned
And the simple truth is after that night came
I lied, played the blame game, tried just to save face
Text message, best seven hours of the day
But the power that it gave, oooh that coward I became
Like my bubble burst; the fucking hurt to see you laugh
Treat him as you treated me, that special feeling ceased at last
Bleeding as I write, but at least I get to feed this pad
Hunger growing for the truth but once I know you see my past
Then I'll be at peace at last, maybe it's a doubt too
Took a couple years but now I'm NOT crazy about you


My heart's breaking, I start shaking, I'm unaware,
That dark places have long faces 'cause I'm fuckin' scared.

Once I glare into your past my heart races
Because that sudden flare for your act has gone vacant

If I'm wrong, fake it, I'm trapped in this hotel,
I checked in, my best friend laughs at my slow Hell.

The fact is our old selves faded and every feeling is gone
Never meant to get offended but it's different when all...

You ever think about is how you'll never get her back
Can't even frame this damn feeling, can you picture that?

Sitting back with an empty glare, thinking of the past
Dreaming of the path that'll bring me to you fast

And it's interesting at that, since this room melts
In rhythm with my craziness, baby, when did you tell me that,

It'd never happen now I'm left digesting sadness
Wrestling a plethora of feelings, so pathetic that I'm
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Re: [#4] Catastrophic - "Crazy About You" (Text + Audio) (TR

Postby Francesco » Jun 16th, '13, 01:54

Well done both of you... :y: I loved the back to back rhyming in the third verse!
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Re: [#4] Catastrophic - "Crazy About You" (Text + Audio) (TR

Postby Sam. » Jun 16th, '13, 21:39

Eedee nailed it with his content and flow. Combined verse were the best part of this drop. DGAF's verse lacked proper multi in his individual verse, but that's okay to an extent because the flow was good. Content was really nice, so was the presentation. Good shit.
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Re: [#4] Catastrophic - "Crazy About You" (Text + Audio) (TR

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jun 16th, '13, 21:54

Appreciate the feed mane. As for multis....ehhhhh. To each his own I guess :y:
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How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: [#4] Catastrophic - "Crazy About You" (Text + Audio) (TR

Postby Sam. » Jun 16th, '13, 22:17

It's not that they weren't there, but was a little awkward to me.
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Re: [#4] Catastrophic - "Crazy About You" (Text + Audio) (TR

Postby Trimss » Jun 19th, '13, 16:27

Menzo wrote:You both this really well, Eedee I think edged DGAF out overall. It was all nicely done.

But...that beat man...it's so corny.


This is what I thought.. Eedee, please, work more on your beat choices. They make you sound corny and generic. Please, stop choosing the same type of beats every wack internet MC raps over. You're better than that.

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Re: [#4] Catastrophic - "Crazy About You" (Text + Audio) (TR

Postby Eedee » Jun 20th, '13, 02:27

Trimss wrote:
Menzo wrote:You both this really well, Eedee I think edged DGAF out overall. It was all nicely done.

But...that beat man...it's so corny.


This is what I thought.. Eedee, please, work more on your beat choices. They make you sound corny and generic. Please, stop choosing the same type of beats every wack internet MC raps over. You're better than that.

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I know, dawg. This is for a mixtape, anyway. Lol... All my actual new stuff have been over original beats from Demaz and I (for like... my solo album, that is). But I know what you mean. I got you. :y:
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Re: [#4] Catastrophic - "Crazy About You" (Text + Audio) (TR

Postby Trimss » Jun 20th, '13, 22:26

Good to hear man. You know it's nothing against you and your actual rapping though. It's just the beats and hooks. There are a lot of great beats on the net and this one seems so typical. :y:

I'll check your newest original stuff too
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Re: [#4] Catastrophic - "Crazy About You" (Text + Audio) (TR

Postby Eedee » Jun 21st, '13, 01:53

Thanks, man. Only reason I chose this one is because of some shit with my ex. The hook captured that shit perfectly, despite its corniness.
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