Bigray - She Will (Remix)

[Just Silver]

I liked this piece much more than the big ray style
From the beginning the flow stays smooth but gets a bit choppy near the end

Liked this line

We all the same but the government will make the
differ
And separate the hoods and colours so we kill each
other

Otherwise this piece stands out nice transitions and vocab

7.5/10

[Snakebeast]

First verse:

Okay. I'm loving the structure. It flows easily and very well. A little awkward at times (for example, the "It’s not an issue if you doing you" line felt too short), but overall, it's structured very well. The rhymes aren't extremely creative or anything, but they're not forced at all, and feel well placed. Once again, there is an exception:

We all the same but the government will make the differ
And separate the hoods and colours so we kill each other

That bolded word just almost killed that awesome verse you had going there. Only your last two lines managed to save that atrocity of a forced rhyme. Couldn't you have just kept "difference" and rhymed it with "other and" It wouldn't have been the best, but it's still better than cutting a word in half just to make it rhyme.

That said, a fantastic verse with a strong opening and ending.

Here are some parts I loved:

Nobody listens, I only hear myself speakin’
So if you kill me in my sleep ill go to hell dreamin’
I see people they schemin’ they transparent
The pain inside my lyrics ya’ hear it I can’t bare it

Flows fantastically to the beat. Would prefer if you replaced "they" with "they're", though. I'm just a grammar nazi like that.

I’m just a rapper with a bigger mind
Pac and Biggie said it best, we only live to die

As I said before, saves this verse after the lazy rhyming two lines prior. Great way to end off a verse.

Second verse it gets worse, it gets no better than this, amateurs drink veteran piss...

Another good verse. Not sure which one is better. Once again, some awkward structuring ("I am just developin’ a rapper in this industry" line is too short) but still good. The opening isn't as strong as your first verse, but I feel like your last two lines make up for it.

Nothing else to say, really.

Parts I liked:

"If y’all don’t know me than your point of views irrelevant
There’s no one that can phase me when I step inside my element"

This flows FANTASTICALLY to the beat.

t’s a message for the people that are so concerned
With how I’m livin’ and the money that I fuckin’ earn

I obviously can't feel the energy behind these lines, but I have a feeling that I would if this was audio.

Overall, pretty good. A few rough edges, but it all sounds good. I'm not seeing the relevancy of the Drake hook, though.

7.8/10

[Snakebeast]

I actually had an idea of a Canadian cypher/collab song type thing where we play on the Canadian stereotype and make it extreme ie. taming and riding polar bears, suffocating beavers with maple syrup before impaling them on pine trees. Call it "The Revised Canadian Anthem"

And no problem, bro. I always like reading good shit

[Just Silver]

Im up for a cypher