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What is left for me to say?

Postby SliK » Jul 21st, '13, 09:31

What is left for me to say? I'm better than you
Dropped a diss to Sam just for wreckin' my mood
("I'm in a first world country bitch you're beggin' for food!")
Took the CW champ - put his head in a noose
Then stepped on a Spyder - left him dead on my shoe
I'm bettin' that you, ain't ready to lose
So back the fuck off cos i'm set to abuse
The next corny faggot who's forgettin' the rules
Step to me I bet you'll be regrettin' the move
Next thing to do is erase the mighty D-GAF
By spittin' writtens that'll take the title he has
smoke him like a weed stash 'till he DOES give a fuck
Look him in his eyes cold as ice and tell him "give it up"
Wish me luck now cos I'm off-on-a-whim
Offerin'-Trimss some really good advice
Cos this gay makes bigray sound like crooked I
So next time you end a bar just ask... "would it rhyme?"
You really shouldn't try, drop the pen pack it away
Cos you'll end up gettin smacked with a capital K
Now I'm lookin at you Menzo, Ima rattle ya cage
Stuck in a rut, skills vanished away
Like the meat on your bones, you look ravished with AIDS
That is to say you 're a fucking gay bitch
Forget the acne cream or a regular face lift
Face it, you'd need a tractor beam from an alien space ship
Ok that was mean, but you need to embrace it
Where's your Ego now dude was all of it wasted?
I'm getting pretty jaded from all of this crap
I'm getting pretty faded, hence all of this rap
I'm beggin you to diss me, please fall in the trap
Or you can cry "Geno!" and just crawl in his lap
You fell off hard dude I'll never fall off in fact
I got the proof right here cos I slaughtered this track

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Re: What is left for me to say?

Postby CrashBand » Jul 21st, '13, 11:47

Dope drop.
I'm not tryin to be rude, but I sincerely wanna fuck the taste out of your mouth
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Re: What is left for me to say?

Postby Trimss » Jul 21st, '13, 17:14

bigray wrote:Nice drop, some lines were pretty dope, although I didn't get the "smacked with a capital K" line.

You know what they say right?

"Let them diss you first respond immediately"


Yeah that was a dope drop. Is the capital K a reference to the K in your name, Slik?
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Re: What is left for me to say?

Postby Snakebeast » Jul 21st, '13, 18:26

Forget the acne cream or a regular face lift
Face it, you'd need a tractor beam from an alien space ship


I loved this line :laughing:

This was fantastic. Not much to say, except make more.

And diss me, you flaming faggot. You DIDN'T MENTION ME! I feel unloved now :'(
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Re: What is left for me to say?

Postby Sam. » Jul 21st, '13, 20:23

You love me a lot, don't you? Dissing me for wrecking your mood? Lmao..crazy how you're the one who FEELS like this on an Internet Forum. Fuck that, mate. I mean, come on for fuck sakes.

Jokes aside, though, this was a sick ass drop. You've established yourself as a ferocious spitter of Rhymes by your way of lyricism, and this by no exception is a fraction of your abilities. The way you maintained the Multis is commendable. The ending is a classic. Good work, keep it up.
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