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Survival remix..

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Survival remix..

Postby Halftongue Dre » Aug 17th, '13, 00:03

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Because it's healthy you need your friendly care, alive from healing air
Asking why does He carry me revealed in hope, does He still care?
Over willing, lifted upward to encounter tears
Witness how loving taps back after expanding open, puffing outwardly
So run up and hug Him back while He's pouring out fanatically, designed rushing you have to swim
Spinning rudders to maximum, grinding the yacht if hit thumping back through it
But don't fit the breaks to the motor even if you trust it's been slightly run
Slowly use it good as a dose of what make's you nudge
Caught in a scuffle afraid of acting tough
Because if some got love seeing it torn askew as an indicator lift, why elevate the madness 
Break it up, scant from my glimpse I tell you, be gone phony
Cold as frigged nature's gust, gave ya chills to mix those veins up major rush
Remain sudden, made to puzzle dwellers, a lost mosquito
With fang's afraid to suck, can't stand to make this whole thing up..
Last edited by Halftongue Dre on Oct 9th, '13, 06:19, edited 3 times in total.
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Re: Survival remix..

Postby Halftongue Dre » Oct 6th, '13, 10:57

i think almost every word for word rhymes with his first verse
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Re: Survival remix..

Postby DƎRDYPK » Oct 6th, '13, 13:52

Hey man, I just wanted to say this was really good, In fact if you don't mind I'v entered it in a poetry contest for the CHance to win a $500 prize CHeck, thanks :b:
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Re: Survival remix..

Postby Halftongue Dre » Oct 6th, '13, 19:37

DƎRDYPK wrote:Hey man, I just wanted to say this was really good, In fact if you don't mind I'v entered it in a poetry contest for the CHance to win a $500 prize CHeck, thanks :b:


Damn. You didn't have to do that. Thanks my dude..
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