Letting it loose on you friends..

[Halftongue Dre]

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Parody therapy, Eminem do you remember me?
Executed as no remorse for your enemy.
With the high powered bombs you've sent in mentally.
To send me steadily over the edge,
like the memories that you've left,
when they were let in.
Like the entity.
The friend.
Allegedly amity only sensed,
through lyrics in our recipes.
Shared in relation to the chemistry going against,
all odds for some charity.
Never bending in and up after a fall.
Carefully retaining a tendency not to fret, Nah,
cause the boundaries been set.
Qualifying us as every one's enemy never ending in death.
Pause.
No sympathy when it was left in jeopardy.
No rehearsal to live in controversy when they said,
plenty of things complimentary to our rep.
Energy spent ready to embrace a heavy dose of respect.
Resembling a frenzy,
assembled down in the depths.
Where it got messy.
The mess we came up out of dispelling the trench.
Direct entry into the vent,
pen with a stench sketchy.
So let me sketch it,
a picture painted as weird graffiti feared to be read.
Confetti popping off so celebrate it instead.
Because when it comes out shooting you better be ready to get,
stupid and used up in another crazy thought when my cranium eludes to doing things,
I once refused to do now that its been fed.
Up in my head rooted, Nope!
Won't do it,
instead I chose to just lose it.
Letting it loose on you friends..

[superman11]

Really hard to read. It's good but hard to figure out how it flows and where to pause. Check out some other posts and try to organize yours better. I think it would make a huge difference.

[Halftongue Dre]

Alright man. Thanks for the feedback..

[Flamez]

Yeah I agree you just need to structure it better to make it easier to read cuz it was hard trying to figure out how the flow went, but other than that it was good.

[Halftongue Dre]

Damn so crazy how things unfold..

[DƎRDYPK]

True, also tweaking some of this one too. thanks again will link my feedback here if I decide to post a CW piece.

[Halftongue Dre]

dope..